Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many countries, Educational institutes for students remain closed for two months or in summer holidays. There are a lot of reasons to value long holidays like rest at homes in extreme hot or cold weather, syllabus coverage, explore the world on their own, visit relatives at days off and relax from their chaotic routine while on shorter holidays you can not do all these things at once. For instance, if you have done anything and want to do another also but you can not do it because holidays are about to over.

Schools remained closed mostly in summers for lengthy period because children can get sick, dehydrate, irritated and can not focus on studies due to the atmospheric conditions because it plays an important role in keeping you and your mood fresh and healthy. Those who are weak in studies or due to any other reason could not be able to cover their syllabus can easily do it without any worry. Moreover, they can go to visit their extended families and different places to enjoy and explore because in my opinion, experience you get from travelling can not get from books. You get a chance to collect memories, souvenirs, learn different cultures and languages etc. Additionally, many people plan their pending house chores and other things on break days from their work.

On the contrary, some individuals prefer small vacations because they start to get bore after some time and want to go on their work because they can not live free longer. Also, Parents want short vacations because their kids are very naughty and disturb them so much that guardians get frustrated and think that if their children will go to school they can easily fine time for themselves to relax and chill.

In conclusion, long school holidays have more significance than brief getaway because you can do so many things on prolonged leisure time but it vary from person to person, we can not neglect the argument of citizens who want small leaves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both questions and gives a clear overall view: long holidays are valuable, although some people prefer shorter breaks. Relevant benefits include rest in extreme weather, catching up with schoolwork, visiting relatives and experiencing other cultures. The travel example is supported with details such as learning languages and collecting memories. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: “syllabus coverage” is mentioned in the opening but not clearly developed, and the argument that parents favour shorter holidays because children are naughty could be explained more objectively, for example by discussing childcare pressures or disruption to parents’ routines. Developing these less convincing points and linking each benefit more directly to the questions would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the benefits and arguments for shorter holidays, and a conclusion. The progression from the value of long breaks to the opposing view is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “On the contrary” help guide the reader. However, the opening sentence contains a long list of ideas, and the example about wanting to do another activity is unclear and does not connect smoothly to the main point. Some linking is mechanical, while references such as “it” in “because it plays an important role” have an uncertain antecedent. Grouping related ideas more selectively and using clearer links between claims and explanations would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary, including “dehydrate,” “extended families,” “souvenirs,” “cultures,” and “pending house chores.” These choices help communicate several distinct benefits of school breaks. However, a number of word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “rest at homes,” “get bore,” “fine time,” and “small leaves.” “Chaotic routine” and “atmospheric conditions” also sound imprecise in their contexts. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main ideas, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check whether a word has the correct form and meaning before using it; this would make the vocabulary more consistently appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “while,” and “if,” and the main message remains understandable. Some sentences are controlled, such as the explanation that children may become dehydrated in hot weather. However, errors occur in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “it vary from person to person” needs subject–verb agreement, while “if their children will go to school” uses an unsuitable future form in the conditional clause. The opening also joins many ideas into an overloaded sentence, and punctuation around clauses is sometimes weak. Review conditional structures and agreement, and divide long sentences so each claim is expressed clearly.

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