Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countrise, primary and secondary institute shut down for two months or more in summer holidays. Mostly people consider that it is helpful for children becauce at this they spend some time with their parents and obtain some basic knowlodage from their adults. From my prosspective it is a favorable for them due to fact they get some time for further activities and they stay at home healthy because that days temperature stay high.

In my opinion, closing of schools during summer is beneficial for child and also for teachers. In this time period they can learn certain activities from their elders and also manage some time for sport activities which give them health benefits. For example, boys can learn some things about their responsibilities of their elders and girls can learn some cooking skills from their mothers.

Another benefit is that they can stay under coustody of adults these warm days, which can mantain their health properly if they go to school in these days then they can get some dehydration issues. For example, in pakistan many students got that kind of diseases in summer, but certain people think that shorter holidays are bater for them but its only favourable in that kind of countries where temperature stay below 25 degree which is normal for living otherwise it's harmful for their health.

Having long holidays for children is bater to do some activities which enhance their knowlodage about whole life and also they will get attrect from news things or activity which can help them in their future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the value of long holidays by mentioning time with family, sports and other activities, and protection from heat-related illness. The Pakistan example gives one relevant illustration. However, the task also asks for arguments in favour of shorter holidays, and this side receives very little development: you briefly say shorter breaks may suit countries with cooler temperatures, but do not explain other possible benefits, such as maintaining learning routines or reducing learning loss. Your position is broadly in favour of long holidays, but it is not consistently or clearly established, and several ideas—such as learning responsibilities or cooking—are asserted rather than explained. Develop both sides with specific reasons and make your overall view explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some paragraphing, and the ideas about family activities and hot-weather health are grouped in a generally understandable way. However, there is no clear overall progression: the opening repeats points that appear later, and the final paragraph restates the benefits instead of drawing the discussion together. Connections between ideas are sometimes abrupt, particularly the shift from dehydration to the brief point about shorter holidays. Linking phrases such as “Another benefit” and “For example” help signal relationships, but they are used in a limited, repetitive way and do not always make the logic clear. Organise the response into a clear introduction, separate paragraphs for each side of the question, and a conclusion that states your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “dehydration,” “responsibilities,” “health benefits” and “summer holidays,” so the main subject is usually identifiable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make the writing harder to read, for example “countrise,” “knowledage,” “coustody” and “attrect.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “get some time for further activities” and “get attrect from news things.” Repetition of “beneficial,” “activities” and “health” further restricts expression. Work on accurate spelling and natural collocations, and choose more precise terms when explaining educational or family benefits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if they go to school in these days then they can get some dehydration issues.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “it is a favorable for them,” “closing of schools … is beneficial for child,” and “temperature stay high,” which show problems with articles, number agreement and verb forms. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention; the long sentence beginning “For example, in pakistan…” joins several ideas without clear control. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with clear clauses and correct agreement.

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