Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Holidays are actually a pretty fun and students get some days to relax, enjoy their life and spend time at home or go visiting new places according to their interest and resources. Subsequently,many students enjoy watching movies and doing summer homework as well beside any strict routine of going to school and woke up early for going to school. Actually summer holidays mainly lies in that months when sun is at it's peak and especially in the Asian countries because most of asian countries had a extreme hot summer. It reduces the problem of headache,fever and many other diseases to kids since they don't have to go to school in extreme hot weather. It's actually a pretty amazing idea to let them be responsible for their work, doing themselves at home rather than visiting to school.After all, I believe it's pretty good to let students get out of hectic routine of going school at least for some months but there is always a debate as well especially when it's hard for the teachers to cover the syllabus in remaining monthd of the year so what u had witnessed oftenly teschers let students attend classes in summer holidays naming as summer classes. Lets take an example of an employee who works for whole year continuously without leave,later on he will feel more weak,tired ad his/her mind just shut downs so everyone deserves rest even kids especially when they have to go school all the months of years except traditional holidays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions to some extent: you explain that long holidays give students time to rest and avoid extreme heat, and you briefly mention the difficulty teachers face in covering the syllabus. However, the response focuses much more on the value of long breaks than on arguments for shorter holidays, which are not clearly explained. The point about summer classes hints at a possible solution but is not developed into a reason for shortening the break. Your position is also not consistently clear, as you praise long holidays while only briefly acknowledging their drawbacks. The response is one word below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement. Develop both sides with specific explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic line of thought, moving from students’ leisure and health benefits to the pressure on teachers and a comparison with employees needing rest. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the two parts of the question are not clearly separated and the progression is difficult to follow. Linking words such as “Subsequently,” “Actually,” and “After all” are used, but some do not show the relationship between ideas accurately, and several points run together in lengthy sentences. Organise the essay into an introduction, a paragraph on the benefits of long holidays, a paragraph on the case for shorter holidays, and a conclusion. Use clear references and transitions to show how each point connects.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “hectic routine,” “extreme hot weather,” “syllabus,” and “traditional holidays.” These choices help communicate the general subject, and there is some attempt to vary expression. However, the range is uneven, with informal or imprecise phrases such as “pretty fun,” “pretty amazing idea,” and “mind just shut downs.” Several word choices and forms are inaccurate, including “a extreme hot summer” and “monthd,” while spelling and spacing errors also distract the reader. Aim for more precise, appropriately formal language and check collocations and spelling. For example, describe the effect of heat as a health risk rather than listing illnesses without a clear connection.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “since,” “when,” and “so,” but these structures are often difficult to control. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “students enjoy … doing summer homework … beside” and “most of asian countries had a extreme hot summer.” Sentence boundaries are also frequently unclear: the final sentence joins several complete ideas with commas, making the reasoning hard to follow. There are some simple structures that communicate meaning, but complex attempts are often faulty, and punctuation errors add to the difficulty. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate conjunctions and punctuation.

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