Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In most of the countries,primary and secondary schools closed for two months or more in the summer holidays

In most of the schools the holidays were about the 2 to 3 months because in summar there is lot of hot days the weather is too much warm and the student do not felt good in these days in school and most of the schools close in this era

the value of long holidays most of the students enjoy these holidays and reather then other students learn more knoweldge in these holidays.

i want to share my own experience about these holidays

when i was in primary school i learn too much new things about study in my summer holidays i increse my knoweldge in these holidays and most of my friends just enjoy these holidays like they spend there time in playing cricket , football and hockey

in this situation there are a lot of arguments in favour of shorther holidays

schools should have to make short holidays in summer they should have to give different task in their summar break which the student should have to complete in there summar vacations the summar vacations should just have to give about one or half mounth then the students will be stay focus on their studies they will never change their mind in differnet kind of activities in these summer holidays

School should have to give a lot of task to give there students and the students should have to complete that task in their summar vacations most of the sutents like me attain different kind of activities and some other knoweldge about life and world in these holidays

i want to say that students should have to focus on their studies as well as other activities in these summer breaks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you explain that long breaks allow students to enjoy themselves and learn, and you argue that shorter breaks could help them stay focused and complete school tasks. Your personal example about learning new things in primary school is relevant. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the value of long holidays is mostly asserted, and the case for shorter holidays relies mainly on focus and assigned tasks, without explaining these benefits in detail or comparing them clearly. Your position is also not fully clear, since you present benefits on both sides but do not state which arrangement you consider preferable. Develop each point with a reason and a specific example, and make your overall view explicit. (Nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a recognisable overall movement from the reasons for long holidays to arguments for shorter ones, and the personal experience gives the response a relevant point of reference. However, ideas are grouped into long, loosely connected blocks rather than clearly developed paragraphs. The opening repeats the prompt, while phrases such as “in these holidays” and “summer vacations” recur without always making the relationship between points clear. The transition “in this situation” does not clearly show how the previous discussion leads to the case for shorter breaks. Use separate paragraphs for the two sides and a conclusion, and connect each claim to its explanation with clearer referencing and linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “summer holidays,” “focus on their studies,” “activities,” and “knowledge,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “holidays,” “students,” and “task.” Some inaccurate word choices and collocations make parts difficult to interpret, such as “learn more knowledge,” “attain different kind of activities,” and “the weather is too much warm.” Spelling errors, including “summar,” “knoweldge,” and “sutents,” also reduce clarity. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for learning, recreation, and school breaks, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example the sentence explaining that students may stay focused if holidays are shorter. This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range of sentence structures remains limited, and longer sentences are often difficult to follow. Verb forms and agreement are frequently inaccurate: “schools closed” and “the student do not felt good” do not express the intended meaning correctly. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention; for instance, the opening lacks a full stop, and several sentences run together or begin without appropriate capitalisation. Practise accurate past and present forms, then divide complex ideas into complete, correctly punctuated sentences.

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