Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, primary and secondary schools have the final vacation of the year for two months or more. In this essay i will discuss the benefits of extended holidays for students without forgetting to discuss the positive point of shorter school holidays.

On one hand, all students are excited for school holidays due to the fact that it refresh their brain properly as well as give students the ability to be productive in the next years of their studies. In addition, students can travel and enjoy with their parents moments and that help them to release from stress and give them new energy for the new year of study.not only this but also give them the sense of missing their classes as well as teachers.

On the other hand, despite of the beneficial side of long school holidays, the shorter holidays are vital for students owing to it give when they have this long period the students build a new bad habit such scrolling, playing video games which is leads them to be addicted with cellphones. For instance, my little brother have the same priod due to long school holidays which that lead him to be addicted with playing video games and we faced a huge challenge as his family to heal him from this bad habit.

In conclusion, altought long holidays school have a fascinating effect on students and give them the freedom, we cannot forget the harm effect on them which is lead to laziness and building a new detrimental habit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions and maintain a relevant overall position: long breaks allow students to rest and spend time with family, while shorter breaks may reduce unhelpful routines. The examples about travel and your brother’s gaming habit make the discussion more concrete. However, the value of long holidays is explained more clearly than the case for shorter holidays, which focuses mainly on screen use and does not explore other possible benefits, such as maintaining learning routines. Some points also need fuller explanation: for example, how time away from school helps students become more productive is asserted rather than demonstrated. Develop both sides with balanced reasons and explain how each example supports your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each side of the discussion, and a conclusion. The signposts “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow, and the personal example is placed appropriately within the argument for shorter holidays. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with the next level. However, links are sometimes mechanical, and the long second-body paragraph combines several ideas without clearly separating them. The phrase “not only this but also” is not smoothly connected to the preceding sentence, while the conclusion repeats earlier points rather than synthesising them. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and organise each paragraph around a more focused sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “extended holidays,” “release from stress,” “addicted,” and “detrimental habit.” There are also attempts to use less common expressions, such as “fascinating effect,” although this is not a natural collocation in this context. Noticeable word-choice, word-form, and spelling problems sometimes make the reader pause: “the positive point” is imprecise, “a new bad habit” is awkward, and “priod” and “altought” are misspelled. Some phrases, including “enjoy with their parents moments,” are difficult to interpret naturally. Build a more precise range for discussing rest, learning, and routines, and check collocations and spelling during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “due to the fact that” and “despite.” However, control is uneven, and errors in verb forms, agreement, sentence boundaries, and punctuation occur across the response. For example, “it refresh their brain” needs subject–verb agreement, while “that help them” also requires an appropriate verb form. The sentence beginning “despite of the beneficial side” has a faulty construction, and “which is leads them” combines incompatible verb forms. There are also run-on or poorly joined sentences, particularly in the paragraph about long holidays. Practise building accurate complex sentences with one clear main clause, then check agreement, verb forms, and punctuation before adding further clauses.

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