Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, the most countries primary and secondary schools close their classes in the summer holidays for two months or more because in this time, the students get sufficient time to spent with their family members and they can go to visit new places.

There are several advantages of poviding long school holodays to both the school staffs and the students, Firstly, when the classes are close for long time then the students can spent quality time with their family, at this time they learn about their house daily activities like cooking and other regular activities. Secondaly, the students visit new places during their long holidays, which helps to reduce their stress and assignment pressure. Furthermore, during the long vacation the students can develop new skills like computer skill, communication skill and so on. For example, my elder brother used to study in city scholl which was far away from my house, when his school provide the summer holidays, he came to home then we did enjoy a lot and we played cricket, football and volleyball with him. Due to the above reasons, the primary and secondary schols should give long summer holidays.

However, the schools should close their class for shorter days as the courses cannot be completed if they close the schools for longer days. Firstly, when the schools are closed for lomger days the course content cannot be completed with in available short period of time which will definitely impact on the students academic performance. additionally, when the schools are closed for short time they can more focus on their students academic performance as well as other their individuals behaviour. For example, in Nepal, some schools provide short holidays, which has positively impact on the both school reputation and academic performance.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the first body paragraph explains benefits such as family time, visiting places and developing skills, while the next gives a case for shorter holidays by referring to course completion and academic performance. The example about your brother also makes one benefit more concrete. However, the discussion is uneven and several points are asserted rather than explained. For instance, the claim that shorter breaks improve school reputation is not clearly connected to the argument, and the value of long holidays for school staff is mentioned but not developed. The conclusion is incomplete (“In conclusion, those wh”), so your final position is not fully stated. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation or relevant example, and finish with a complete summary of both sides.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for the two sides, and an attempted conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondaly,” “Furthermore,” and “However” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and several ideas are joined without showing their precise relationship. The first paragraph moves from family activities to travel, stress and skills, while the second repeats the point about course content in closely related sentences. Some references, such as “they” and “this time,” are not always immediately clear. The unfinished conclusion also prevents the essay from closing coherently. Group related reasons, avoid repeating the same point, and use linking phrases to express cause, contrast and result more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “summer holidays,” “course content,” “academic performance,” “communication skill” and “stress.” There are also attempts to use more specific expressions, such as “quality time” and “develop new skills.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation errors reduce clarity: “poviding,” “holodays,” “scholl,” and “lomger” are examples. Phrases such as “close their classes,” “visit new places,” and “their individuals behaviour” are also unnatural or imprecise in context. Build a bank of accurate school-related collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise choices would help you express the same ideas without relying repeatedly on “long,” “short” and “students.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause with “because,” a relative clause beginning “which,” and a conditional-style sentence about course completion. These attempts show some range, but control is inconsistent and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “the most countries primary and secondary schools,” “students get sufficient time to spent,” and “when the classes are close,” where sentence structure, verb forms or agreement are faulty. There are also problems with articles, plurals and prepositions, as in “for long time” and “within available short period of time.” The final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then check subject–verb agreement, verb forms and articles when combining clauses.

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