Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, the rapidly changing the world, this topic becoming very crucial for parents and school's students. All students need a break for refreshing their mind and spends time with their family member. Moreover, many students are usally go for the travelling to different cities or area.

From my perspective, there are many evidence which i discuss with example. The students need break for refreshing a mind and they spends little time on their skills. However, the primary and secondary schools close atleast two months or more for summer holidays, somehow it would be benifical for students who want to develope their skills and they are going for the travelling. Many students do not practicing the last home work and they do not focuse on the study.

Moreover, students are usally more time on social media to scrolling reels and watching unwanted content overhere. But, rare students who worried about their final exam so which students will preparing next upcoming exam.

Although, the students have any difficulty on any topic they would not directly solve with tutor. In addition, if the primary and secondary schools change their vaction with shorter so, students can easily engage with tutor and solve any topic easily. Also, short vaction have enough time to develope the student's skills and visiting tourist place.

In conclusion, the schools follow the shorter school holidays so it would be automatically benifite to the students due to they can easily solve their doubt and they teacher focus on the syllabus and they have enough time to revise and solve topic before exam.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions and give a clear preference for shorter holidays in the conclusion. Relevant points include students having time to refresh, travel and develop skills during a break, and the possibility of getting help from tutors during shorter holidays. However, the value of long holidays is not explained in much depth, and the case for shorter holidays is also limited: for example, the claim that students can “easily engage with tutor” is not supported with a specific explanation or example. Some points, such as students using social media or not practising homework, are introduced without showing clearly how they support your position. Develop fewer ideas with reasons and examples, and make your position clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its general structure. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” However, the ideas do not progress consistently: the discussion moves from travel and skills to homework, social media, exams and tutoring without clearly connecting these points. Some transitions are also confusing, particularly “But, rare students who worried about their final exam,” which does not make the relationship between the ideas clear. Organise the body around the two questions, with one paragraph explaining the benefits of long holidays and another presenting the case for shorter ones. Use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “summer holidays,” “final exam,” “tutor,” “syllabus” and “revise.” This gives you enough basic language to communicate the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “refreshing their mind,” “go for the travelling,” “unwanted content overhere” and “solve their doubt.” Spelling errors such as “usally,” “benifical” and “vaction” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of natural phrases for discussing education and leisure, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “take a break,” “travel to other places” and “ask a tutor for help.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “if,” and you use some future forms. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “Nowadays, the rapidly changing the world, this topic becoming very crucial” lacks a complete, correctly formed opening clause, while “many students are usally go” combines incompatible verb forms. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “they spends little time” and “if the primary and secondary schools change their vaction with shorter.” These frequent errors can make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms, articles and agreement in each sentence.

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