Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is an ongoing debate about whether in several country espicially primary and secondary school shutdown for two months or more in the summer holidays.I think that there are several reason in close of both school.

Frist of all, student are studies in eight month so they are breaking only two month . In Bangladesh every academics in ramadan or special occution without do not close school and university. For example, students when their study break then they can travell and enjoable with their family or other relatives . As a result , they can strongly boost thier knowledge.Also , every student have explored thier life so that in future they can build thire carrer .Moreover, it is very valuable moment one a student . Sometime, every student come back of study and they can not stress of life .I think long time school close is an important for students .

On the other hand , there are some positive side of shortes schoold holiday . Initially , long time school close can student are lazy and do not focused on study . Concequence, they can not good mark of result and there parents eassly blam thire school close for long time .Most of the time students fell depression and funstation.However, they think that shortages time break students can not harm and they can achive good result .

In my opinion , its totally depent on a student because they can long time schoold close again they concantation of thire study .It is not depent on thire school shutbown rather than it is relay on thire.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you describe benefits of a long break, such as travelling with family and having time to recover from study, and argue that shorter holidays may help students stay focused and achieve better results. Your final view—that the effect depends on the student—also gives the response a position. However, several points are difficult to interpret or are not sufficiently explained, including “strongly boost their knowledge” and the claim that students may experience depression during long holidays. The discussion of shorter holidays is especially brief, and the conclusion ends with an incomplete idea about what school closures depend on. Develop each argument with a clear explanation or example, and state your position more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “On the other hand,” and a concluding paragraph. This helps the reader identify the two sides of the discussion. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “As a result,” and “Moreover.” However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: ideas about travel, knowledge, careers, and stress are placed together without clear connections, while the shorter-holiday argument is compressed. Some transitions are used mechanically or do not show the intended relationship, as with “However” before a point supporting shorter breaks. The final sentence is unfinished, which weakens the overall ending. Group related points and use clear topic sentences and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “debate,” “relatives,” “focused,” “depression,” and “achieve good result.” However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the message difficult to understand. Examples include “espicially,” “enjoable,” “thier carrer,” and “shortes schoold holiday”; phrases such as “boost their knowledge” and “funstation” are also unclear or unnatural in context. These problems sometimes require the reader to infer your meaning. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and common word combinations. Prefer precise, familiar expressions over ambitious phrases whose meaning is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason-and-result structure in “As a result, they can strongly boost their knowledge.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, verb forms, and articles frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “student are studies in eight month” combines an incorrect subject–verb pattern with an unsuitable verb form, while “every student have explored their life” has an agreement problem and an unclear construction. The final sentence, “it is relay on thire,” is incomplete. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review singular/plural agreement and articles.

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