Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Plethora of countries shut down their primary and secondary schools for more than 2 months in summer vacations. This helps the students to refresh their mind and play sports. However, there are arguments that which believes that children gets carried away during long vacations.

In today's time, it is very important for children to be mentally stable and physically strong. During the summer holidays, children unequivocally play a lot of outdoor games with their friends. Children enjoy a lot while playh with their friends, Not only they are happy but they are getting stronger physically. I believe children should get longer summer holidays as it helps them to grow further. For instance, I was not good at sports, however during my summer holiday, I used to play cricket and later on because of practicing it daily i mastered the game.

Many parents and teachers have an opinion that shorter school holidays can make children learn and study more about the curriculum. They believe that shorter school vacations can make students smarter and prepare them well for their future. For Example. one of my friend's school had shorter summer holiday and he used to score 20% more than I would score in my exams.

In conclusion, longer school holidays can make children mentally and physically strong, However shorter school vacations can make their grades higher and make them smarter.

In today's time it is very important for children to be mentally stable and physically strong. During the summer holidays, children usually play a lot of outdoor games with their friends, children enjoy a lot while playing with their friends, not only they are happy but they are getting stronger physically. I believe children should get longer summer holidays. It helps them to grow further. For instance, I was not good at sports however during my summer holiday I used to play cricket and later on because of practicing it daily I mastered the game.

Many parents and teachers are keen on children work shorter school holidays because they are worried on study more on curriculum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the essay suffers from significant repetition, as the second half of the text largely restates the first half. This redundancy limits the development of ideas. While the position is clear, the arguments are somewhat simplistic and rely heavily on personal anecdotes rather than broader societal or educational analysis. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces new points rather than repeating previous ones, and aim for a more balanced exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is disrupted by the repetition of the entire body section. The use of cohesive devices is basic and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'In conclusion', 'For instance'). The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the two main arguments is abrupt. The structure would benefit from a more cohesive plan that avoids restating the same points, ensuring that each paragraph contributes uniquely to the overall argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'children work shorter school holidays' and 'worried on study'. The range is somewhat limited, relying on common words like 'good', 'happy', and 'strong'. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary and precise collocations related to education and child development.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'children gets carried away' (subject-verb agreement), 'while playh' (spelling/form), and 'one of my friend's school' (punctuation/possessive). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and proofreading for minor slips would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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