Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In modern era, many countries schools of primary and secondary standard to close for couple of month or more in the summer vacation. I firmly believe that long term vacation is useful for students convient time for relaxation. I agree with the both views and give the reason in the ensuing paragraph with relevant example.

There are plethora of reasons why students have long term vacation. Primarily, During vacation time is more reliable to enhance new skill. In other words , School holiday time to easily children focusing on specific skill. If they are more time to enhance through gain knowledge and learn something new and find new opportunity. Secondly, Summer time is best for children relaxation time for study. this is play a crucial role of study to free time and spent more time with family members. In addition, leisure time to explore the world history , play the new games and enhance brain-stroming power.

On the other hand, Shorter school vacation is mandatory. Firstly, small leisure time to pupils grasping skills are constant. In short time period to children do not forget the purpose of study and they cannot distract the particular goal. Apart from this, They cannot learn new skill and not providing the another opportunity. They are only dependent on the specific aim. To epitomy , secondary high school science students are short term vacation for relaxation and them are not distract the own goal. In small period of vacation to use another activity to do and enhance the brain power.

To conclude , schools gives short term holiday to pupils grasping skill are similar and no more distraction. although, long term vacation are useful for the gain more knowledge , enhance other skill and find new opportunity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the argument that shorter holidays prevent students from forgetting the purpose of study is mentioned but not fully explained or supported with clear logic. The position is generally clear, but the expression of ideas is often repetitive and lacks depth. To improve, you should focus on providing concrete examples or more detailed explanations for each point rather than listing several ideas briefly. The conclusion is also somewhat contradictory, as it restates the benefits of long holidays rather than summarising the arguments for both sides as requested.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To epitomy' (likely intended as 'To epitomise') and 'In other words' are used incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly within the second paragraph where the transition between 'enhancing skills' and 'relaxation' is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'brain-stroming power' and 'grasping skills are constant'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'convient' (convenient) and 'epitomy' (epitome). While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word formation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many countries schools... to close'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear main verb, such as 'In short time period to children do not forget...'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty and contain errors that make the text difficult to read. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb, before attempting more complex structures.

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