Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, childrens are the fasture of our society. Considering this, In numerous nations, primary and secondary educational hubs do close for two months or more in the summer holidays. In upcoming paragraph, I will justify the points of both view and as a responsible citizen, I opine with former view point partially agree with statement.

Considering this, there are many reasons to justify the former view points. The first and foremost point is that more participate in physical activities by off springs. To elabarate it, in free time children more focus on sports, they play outside games and participate in games and get medals. Playing improve the physical health. The second point is children helps in financials with their parents. To make it crystal clear, in holidays offsprings do parttime job to falkfill their needs and its possible only in holidays because during school or class time children get trie tried easily.

On the other hand, there are some points to explain lates view points. The first and foremost point is that learners loss their concentration level from study. To justify it, in holidays students didnot give a time to study. Therefore exams time they do not make their focus on study. Moreover, parents have not enough time to give their kids. To make it more precies, parents do their jobs and left their child at home alone. where child feel lonely whereas if child spend more time in school, so, they

make new friends and feel elated. Further more, schools are safer. To cite an example, schools has good security and offsprings get more informative and students are in the observation of teachers. And in schools children feel over the moon to make new friends.

In conclusion, Although parents have no enough time to spend with childrens and child feel lonely and it imf impact on their physical health. Yet, offsprings spend more time in school therefore make new friends and get more informative. And get enough knowledge to get job or business in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the point about children helping with finances is a bit unusual and lacks a clear explanation of how this benefits their development. The position is clear, but the arguments could be more logically extended. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure that each supporting point is fully explained with clear, logical steps rather than just stating the idea.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In upcoming paragraph' or 'To make it more precies'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second half of the essay where the flow between sentences becomes disjointed. The transition between the two sides of the argument is present but could be smoother. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the essay flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices or non-standard collocations, such as 'educational hubs', 'off springs', and 'get more informative'. Some spelling errors, like 'falkfill' and 'precies', also occur. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and the student relies on basic phrasing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('childrens are', 'schools has'), incorrect pluralization, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that plurals are formed correctly.

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