Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Today, it is a common phenomenon that primary and secondary schools are closed for two months in summer vocations. The term of time on school holidays is a crucial factor to cultivate the growth of children or relieve stress from their parents, so we need to have multiple perspectives to analyze it.
One advantage of long school holidays is that children have more time to relax, cultivate their interests and travel around the world. When students study in school, who are normally limited to the specific area, and they follow the arranged routine learning tasks without having access to develop their interests or skills, such as painting, singing and boxing. Long holidays enable them to spur their passion to explore the world and cultivate their abilities.
On the other hand, students can broaden their society horizons and experience in vocations. For example, students are able to do some voluntary works, such as taking care of the older people in community, delivering charity bottles of water to community workers and propagandizing environmental friendly issues. It is truly a significant time for children to develop their social responsibility and kindness.
However, too long holidays potentially cause problems and distress parents. In some cases, some children may not want to go out and get indulged in video games, even seriously that children suffer from health problems because of long screen time and unhealthy time schedule without parental regulation, as parents need to work at that time. Afterwards, the deteriorated cycle will remain if long school holidays remain.
In conclusion, long school holidays can be beneficial to children’s growth and multiplied development, although this development needs parents’ supervision.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
该回答涵盖了题目的两个部分：长假期的价值以及支持缩短假期的论点。你提供了相关的例子，如志愿服务和过度使用屏幕时间的风险。然而，观点的展开有些不均衡。虽然好处表述得很清楚，但关于缩短假期的讨论可以更紧密地与学术或社会成果联系起来。立场始终明确，但结论略显仓促，未能充分综合所提出的论点。为了达到更高的分数，请确保每个要点都通过更详细的推理或具体的现实证据得到充分扩展。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
文章逻辑组织严密，有清晰的引言、主体段落和结论。每个段落都有一个中心主题，有助于读者跟随你的论点。你有效地使用了诸如 'On the other hand' 和 'However' 等衔接手段。然而，有些地方显得略微机械，句子间的过渡可以更平滑。例如，句子 'Afterwards, the deteriorated cycle will remain if long school holidays remain' 有点生硬，影响了逻辑流畅度。提高连接词的多样性并确保指代精确，将提升整体连贯性。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
你展现了足以完成任务的词汇量，使用了如 'phenomenon', 'cultivate' 和 'deteriorated' 等词汇。在词汇选择和搭配上有一些细微的不准确，例如 'propagandizing environmental friendly issues'（这不是 'propagandizing' 的正确用法）和 'multiplied development'。此外，'society horizons' 应为 'social horizons'。虽然这些错误不影响交流，但表明你对较生僻词汇的掌控能力仍在发展中。请专注于学习词汇搭配并在正确的语境中使用词汇，以提高该项评分。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
你使用了简单句和复杂句的组合，这对于该水平来说是合适的。存在一些语法错误，例如 'who are normally limited to the specific area'（缺少明确的主语）以及 'unhealthy time schedule without parental regulation, as parents need to work at that time'。有些表达略显不自然，例如 'The term of time on school holidays'。虽然这些错误很明显，但很少影响读者对你主要观点的理解。为了提升，请专注于主谓一致，并优化你对定语从句和介词的使用。
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