Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, most of the countries provide summer vacation to primary and secondary schools for two months.The big opportunity for Long time vacation that is improve extra curriculum activities skills which is value for time.There also have some arguments in favour of shorter school holiday because of distraction from study and laziness .
Firstly, students scan do several things in their vacation instead of their running academic period . In a primary or a secondary school's student have a routine to go to school everyday except weekends . They have to do their academic study and its feels them quite pressure for instance , homework, classwork, exam . When they have had their summer vacation they can gives their time in others sites they can learn computer skills , they can watch motivational video which can encourage them to invent new things and also they can used their vacation to their family business these would be beneficial.
In addition, There are some reason to reduce the time of summer holidays one of the main point is laziness and also distraction from study . When a student get free time more than they deserve they can less use their time to do potential work. primary and secondary schools students are not mature so everyone dose not use their time for improve good activities they just play more and more also they sleep for long hours which build their mind set lazy. When students are disconnect with study they could not focus after their vacation and it create distruction from their academic study. These are the reason of the arguments of shorter school holidays.
In conclusion, summer vacation could be beneficial for primary and secondary school students if they focus to improve their career based skills . people have some thought about shorter school holidays because of laziness and break the consistency .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention benefits like learning computer skills or family business, these points are not fully extended with specific examples or logical depth. The position is clear, but the explanation of 'laziness' and 'distraction' is repetitive and lacks nuance. To improve, ensure that each main idea is supported by a clear, well-explained example that directly relates to the prompt's requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'There also have some arguments' or 'These are the reason of the arguments'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While there is an overall progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel disjointed at times. Improving the variety and accuracy of your transition signals will help the ideas connect more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'big opportunity', 'good activities', and 'do several things'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'feels them quite pressure' instead of 'puts them under pressure' and 'disconnect with study' instead of 'disconnected from their studies'. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('everyone dose not use', 'student get free time'), incorrect verb forms ('they can used', 'they can gives'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for tense consistency and subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your accuracy.
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