Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays,schools have been providing a ling holidays to students and also festivals holidays.It believed that,many countries,primary and secendary schools close for two months or more in the summer vacations.i partly agree with the given the statment.
To embark with,schools are givinglong holidays to the students and teacher becuase they can spend qulity time with their families and friends and also teacher can relax and streesfull about their syllabus.Notwitstanding,teacher cannot enough time to relax there becuase aecademic pressure and responsbilites.For example,family should plan to go out for a long trip becuase it creates strong emotional bond and also children explore for new places and enhance knowledge.In addition students canlearn to new skills in free time becuase it is more significant for develop ideas and improves better skills durong vacation.They can play outdoors game like cricket,vollyball,and football becuase it can maintain physical fitness and mental wellbeing.Moreover,techare can improves teaching skills and prepare aecademic lessons.
On the other hand,schools are givning shorter holidays rather than long vacation.Long breck can cause students to forget their knowledge especially in subjects like mathematics and languages.students canget shorter braek so it helps to maintain aecademic progress and improves education.Furthermore,regular schools attendence help students learn dicipline and consistent study habit.For example,During the exam,students are preparing homework and aecademic knowledge and also teacher provieds extra lecture and revisions so students can pass the exam and frist rank in the school.
To coclude,schools are givinig shorter vacation better than long holidays becuase children can spend quility time together and create emotional bond.In my opinion,shorter break are better than becuase it helps to children learn properly and gain knowledge.Sometimes techer helps to cover extra class and supports for weekar students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development is inconsistent. While you provide some relevant points, such as family bonding and physical fitness, the arguments are often repetitive or lack depth. For instance, the discussion on academic progress is somewhat circular. The position is clear, but the conclusion contradicts the earlier body paragraph by suggesting shorter breaks are better for emotional bonding, which creates confusion. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported idea and maintain a consistent stance throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To embark with' are non-standard, and transitions between sentences are frequently abrupt. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear signposting; for example, the shift between the benefits of long holidays and the drawbacks is jarring. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will significantly enhance the readability of your work.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede understanding (e.g., 'ling', 'secendary', 'aecademic', 'techare', 'breck'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'streessfull about their syllabus' or 'explore for new places'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific terms like 'academic progress' and 'wellbeing', the high frequency of spelling mistakes and word-choice errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a wider range of vocabulary. Focusing on learning word families and correct spelling will help you move to a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'teacher can improves'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with many missing spaces after commas and periods. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors that make the meaning unclear. The majority of your sentences are simple, and the lack of control over basic grammar significantly affects the clarity of your writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent punctuation before attempting more complex structures.
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