Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this contemporary epoch there is no denying tha fact that school hold a paramount significance in our life so it is believed bye some people that majority of the country close primary and secondary school in two month however wath are tha couse as well as salusion that I shall articulate in future paragraphs.

Admittedly first and foremost, family time spend becouse most of the children only sepend most of that time is study and that way children not spend time our family mabers. Aprat from this stress becouse most of that children very hard reading to tha bookes and other items juts like history book that way children high presar fill and stree that way holiday is very important is children life for example a survey conducted by oxfort university also indicated that japan every year there to for month provide holiday for every school.

However it's predominantly, government should definitely provide to everyone school holiday becouse it is very helpful activity for the inclined boned for every child to love the books and school. Unother unavoidable activity is that summary Vikeshon becouse it is very helpful for children life becouse summary Holiday are helping to children should chants for the other log range family mabers just like aunty and uncle because every summer holiday provided freedam for tha school live to instase a report bye time of india also revealed that japanes children very like to summer holiday becouse it is help to improve to the children bone duo to the uncle and aunty and other relatives.

In conclusion i would reiterate the although there are many cousins of this scenario such as time and stress yet, various effective steps can be to taken to mitigate this issue in from of bone and meet long range nambers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to clearly identify the value of long holidays or the arguments for shorter ones. The ideas are largely incoherent and repetitive, making it difficult to discern a clear position. The student mentions 'stress' and 'family time' as benefits, but these points are not developed with logical reasoning or relevant examples. The reference to an 'Oxford University' study regarding Japan is vague and lacks a clear connection to the prompt's requirements. Overall, the response does not adequately address the task, as the arguments are obscured by significant language errors and a lack of focus.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is severely lacking. There is no clear introduction or conclusion that effectively frames the argument. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'becouse' and 'that way' to link clauses. The internal structure of the paragraphs is chaotic, with sentences often failing to relate to one another. Referencing is unclear, and the transition between the benefits of holidays and the arguments for shorter holidays is non-existent, making the text difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is extremely limited and frequently inaccurate. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'tha' for 'the', 'becouse' for 'because', 'sepend' for 'spend', and 'summary Vikeshon' for 'summer vacation'. These errors often impede communication. The student relies on basic, repetitive words and struggles to use appropriate terminology related to the topic of education or holidays. There is no evidence of an attempt to use less common lexical items, and the word choice is often inappropriate for an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is very weak. The text is riddled with errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order. Almost every sentence contains significant mistakes, such as 'school hold a paramount significance in our life' and 'every year there to for month provide holiday'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences attempted are often grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also problematic, with a lack of proper sentence boundaries. These frequent errors make the text very difficult to read and understand.

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