Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries primary and secondary school play very important role in students education and different schools summer vacations are effectice for student built up and education,In this era i will discuss importance of long holidays and short term holidays.moreover all factors of summer vacations will be discussed with contrast to arguments of short term vacations

In the first part i will explain about primary school education which is almost fron 5 to 11 years old children.The summer olidays are essential for students to cover up all subjects and syllbus given to them and they can not contnue their education due to rising temperature of weather in schools.Therefore fundamental rules and regulations are made for students security and growth.Moreover secondary school students thats about age 12 to 18 years also play vital role in summer camp because certain instructions are given to them in such heated weather.That is why summer vacations are valuable for growth and awareness of children.Furthermore it play effective role in creating sports activities , growth and visting historical places for knowledge bulit up and inspirations of various education exibition.substantially long term holidays are good for learning process and results are strong communicational level among students for confidence and many other activities.

short term school holidays are also other factor which brings some effects in our society. Students can not focus their education completely.Because they have not enough time to focus on their studies. They can not learn new things and other sports activities which is important in educational level.Students can not concentrate on their studies in this heated summer and sometime they missed their lecture by skipping class or sick leave .In the end necessary step are taken for proper management of summer holidays that will bring effective change and increasing awareness between students

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes unclear. For instance, the explanation of why long holidays are beneficial is somewhat repetitive and lacks specific, logical examples. The arguments for shorter holidays are also underdeveloped, focusing more on the inability of students to focus rather than systemic educational or social benefits. The position is present but lacks the depth required for a higher band score, as the reasoning often feels disjointed or circular.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is poorly structured, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'Therefore'), they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, which hinders the flow of the argument. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure lacks the sophisticated organisation needed for a higher score. The essay feels like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'student built up', 'knowledge bulit up', and 'results are strong communicational level'. The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary, but it is often used inaccurately or in a way that does not fit the context. Basic spelling errors (e.g., 'fron', 'exibition', 'olidays') are also present. The range is sufficient to convey the basic message, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and punctuation (e.g., 'In the first part i will explain', 'it play effective role'). Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes the text difficult to read. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar significantly impacts the quality of the writing.

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