Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In foreign country the summer vacation of primary and secondary timeperiod is of two month

The long break has their own benefit and short break has their bad effect i gill my notion in the upcoming paragraph

The school give long time relaxing hour for student due to maintain body fit and good healthy life the abroad school has properly explore about the student how to maintain physical and mentally fit they know the properly role of relaxation in life with the help of holiday the can get relaxation no any of hurdle face about the holiday homework many of the countries like italy they give relaxation time about 5 month to every student because they became fit in abroad country no any type burden of homework at home when the student has free they get interest in other sports like volleyball cricket to get healthy they also huge leisure time to spend with their family and friend in relaxing period they go to tour their their closest ones

However The shorter school holiday has own benefits the student did not loss in the student side and in long time holiday period all the student mind was vanished related to school work and also has burden on the mind to complete their summer vacation work most the student they complete the work on time and properly the country like india and pakisthan give only permission of 1 month to every student for relaxation and also give proper work of vacation the extented holiday give burden to working parents to go their work many of the parents do not have good financial condition to give prper wages to their children many parent face problem related huge relaxing time

In conclusion, the long time vacation have own merits or demerits in long vacation the children have opportunity to focus on sports side and in short vacation they had a huge burden of holiday homework to do in their vacation at home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the discussion on physical fitness and family time is somewhat circular. The argument regarding working parents is relevant but lacks depth. The position is generally clear, but the lack of formal structure and the reliance on informal, sometimes confusing phrasing, prevents a more thorough exploration of the topic. To improve, you should aim to provide more specific, well-developed examples and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct, clearly articulated point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion that effectively frames the argument, and the paragraphing is insufficient. The transition between ideas is often abrupt or missing, making the flow of the essay difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'in the' or 'and'. The lack of punctuation, particularly between sentences, creates a 'run-on' effect that hinders readability. To improve, you must use clear paragraph breaks, topic sentences, and a variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') to guide the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'timeperiod', 'relaxing hour', and 'did not loss in the student side'. The repetition of basic words like 'holiday', 'work', and 'student' indicates a restricted range. Some phrases are difficult to interpret due to non-standard usage, such as 'i gill my notion'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms and focus on using words in their correct context to express ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a total lack of punctuation, which makes it difficult to identify sentence boundaries. Subject-verb agreement errors are common (e.g., 'the school give', 'the student did not loss'). There is also a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple or poorly connected. Articles and prepositions are frequently omitted or used incorrectly (e.g., 'in foreign country', 'to go their work'). To improve, you must focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and the proper use of punctuation to ensure your writing is grammatically sound.

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