Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries primary and secondary school closes for two months or more in the summers so i think so that they are benifical for childrens to save from heat waves and other some things

because in summer the temperature raises from low to very high so it would be more dangerous for kids because if the school open in summer so the childrens would be bacome ill from the heat so my opinio is that the school would be close in summer and kids done their study in home which is benifical for them

in our country when the summers startred they school were close and they give summer holidays to childrens which they have to done in 2 months and they would enjoy the vaccations and do further activites like playing football cricket and other some kind of sports which are benifical for them so the value of long holidays is that scool teachers would have to learn that if they give summer vaccation to the childrens then they would have to take atleast one class in a week online so which are good for students to didnot lose their routine of study

my one major opinion is that teaces would have to take online classes instead of do holiday home work this is i think so its a good learn from students and they didnot lose their routine according to school

if the students didnot go school for 2 months so i think so its difficult to manage their routine

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development is limited and repetitive. The ideas regarding heat waves and online classes are relevant but lack depth and supporting evidence. The position is clear, but the explanation of the 'value' of holidays is somewhat superficial, focusing primarily on health and routine rather than educational or developmental benefits. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or logical reasoning to ensure a more thorough exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The text is essentially one long block, which hinders the logical flow. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'because', 'so'), they are used repetitively and often incorrectly, leading to a mechanical feel. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of distinct paragraphs means the reader has to work hard to identify where one argument ends and the next begins. Improving the use of transition signals and organizing ideas into clear paragraphs is essential for a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple words like 'things', 'good', and 'do'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'save from heat waves' instead of 'protect from' and 'kids done their study' instead of 'complete their studies'. The range is limited, and the lack of variety in word choice restricts the ability to convey more complex ideas. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education and school systems, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'summers startred they school were close'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on sentences connected by 'and' or 'so', lacking proper punctuation. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar—such as 'the childrens would be bacome ill'—are frequent. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb tense usage, and the proper use of punctuation to separate ideas.

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