Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

School education is the primary level of learning for students. In schools, students start from primary education and end in secondary education. In every school, there is well organized plan for learning, games as well as for holidays. In many countries, schools close for two months or more in the the summer holidays. Some people say about the value of longer holidays but some others in favors of shorter holidays. In this essay, we will discuss above statement with arguments in detail by giving pros and cons of longer holidays.

To begin, school education is really important for mentally growth of every child to make the bright future. Basically, schools nourish the children for every good and bad habit as well as develop the mental skills, confidence and communication skills. On the other hand, school's holidays are also important for relaxation of students. In every country, there are summer holidays occur for 2 to 3 months only but it also proceeds to 4 months due to warm weather.

In summer holidays, students have a chance to learn other skills like computer skills, English language skills from any institute. But they also learn from internet by watching videos on YouTube at home. Some students have interest to play indoor and outdoor games. They go to outside in any park to play cricket and football, but some prefer to play games on phone. However, summer holidays are important for relaxation and protection from hot weather. But on the other hand, if the holidays are long for 3 to 4 months, then children will become distract from study and they also waste their time on phones.

In conclusion, holidays should be important but only for 2 months because it is enough time to learn useful skills as well as spend quality time with your family. So, government should implement the rules of vacation which are only for 2 months in every school.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention skill acquisition and relaxation, the points are not fully extended with specific examples or deeper analysis. For instance, the mention of 'computer skills' is brief and lacks detail on how this impacts a student's long-term development. The position is clear, but the argument could be more robustly supported to reach a higher band. Ensure that each main point is followed by a clear explanation or a concrete example to demonstrate a deeper engagement with the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion', which help the reader follow your argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions feel repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the connection between ideas could be smoother. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is more fluid rather than relying on simple sentence-by-sentence listing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'good and bad habit', 'bright future', and 'useful skills'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'mentally growth' (should be 'mental growth') and 'distract from study' (should be 'distracted from their studies'). To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to education and time management. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms will help convey your ideas with greater clarity and impact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the the summer holidays'), verb forms ('holidays are occur'), and preposition usage. Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'some others in favors of shorter holidays'. While you attempt complex structures, they are often marred by errors that, while not impeding communication, are noticeable. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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