Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays. In my opinion, That the good ideas for the students because in the summer seasons many place faces the high temperature in this seasons and every person has sick.

Additionally, I think primary and secondary and the another person has need a race because there are in the summer seasons peoples have facing the many kinds of problems the summer season. In my opinion, summer is the best seasons for the learning some new for the students in the time because in this time students have a 2 months holidays and that time they spend this time everything like how to cook meals and everything in the home. And they need to refresh their mind and enjoying with the something new. The value of the long school holidays for the learning new new things. So that summer vacation is need for the students.

Lastly, In my arguments, in favour of shorter schools holidays students were spend much time with family and friends. They need to in this time, visiting like zoo for a children because there are students were spices and name of the many animals and birds and the another things etc. So that in this time students were learn from this kind of things. In the summer vacation, gains their knowledge from doings anything something new. In the vacation students were learning a new skill,like computer basics,coding and anything and another advantages are students were improve the English and the other language.

In conclusion, That my opinion for the students,don't waste your time for the negative impact, In this time you are need to learn outside of the course to develop your knowledge that's my rights suggestions for the students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding 'learning new things' is mentioned multiple times without specific examples or depth. The position is generally clear, but the reasoning is frequently obscured by unclear phrasing, such as the claim that schools close because 'every person has sick' in high temperatures. To improve, you should focus on providing more logical, well-supported arguments rather than repeating the same points in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently mechanical or misused, such as starting sentences with 'In my arguments' or 'So that'. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'the another person' is unclear in context. The logical flow between sentences is often interrupted by grammatical errors, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument consistently. More variety and precision in linking words would improve the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'things', 'everything', and 'something new', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'every person has sick' instead of 'people get ill' and 'spices and name of the many animals' instead of 'species'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple, often misused vocabulary prevents the essay from reaching a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'That the good ideas'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'In my opinion, That the good ideas for the students because in the summer seasons many place faces the high temperature'. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are almost always faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb.

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