Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more during the summer holidays because students must use that time to learn new skills or upgrade their skills. In my view, short school holidays are important for students to develop new skills.
In contrast, in many countries, primary and secondary schools are closed for two months or more during the summer holidays. However, during the summer time students develop new sports activities like learning to swim, and they develop sportsmanship within them. Additionally, students at summer time explore their villages more and learn new agricultural cultivation processes, meet people, learn from them, spent the quility of time with their grandparents. for exaple In my summer time i mostly prepare to explore my village and meets the old people spent quality time with them.
On the other hand, with shorter school holidays, students are graded to new division it total new start of them for that they are ready for the new standard and again in their routine. Shorter holidays mostly give the advantage to schools; they start their syllabus early, and they have that much time for revision. Add students also focus for their upcoming examinition. For example In 10 std students start their syllabus early because they must be focus on their government exam for get into govt colleges. students get more time for their exam .
To conclusion it totally depends on the school how their curriculum they follow in school and more summer holiday school prepar for extra class for students and shorter school holidays fevor for more focus on students revision process in my oppionin
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide examples like learning to swim or agricultural activities, the explanation remains somewhat superficial. The position is clear, but the structure of the argument is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of depth in the analysis. To improve, ensure that each point is fully explained with a clear link back to the prompt, rather than listing activities or benefits in a fragmented manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often disrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. For example, the phrase 'In contrast' is used incorrectly at the start of the second paragraph, as it does not contrast with the previous statement. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'To conclusion it totally depends'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'new skills' and 'good' (or 'quility'). There are several spelling errors, such as 'quility', 'exaple', 'fevor', and 'oppionin', which occasionally impede readability. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'syllabus' and 'curriculum', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and ensure accurate spelling of common academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('students... spent the quility of time'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms ('students are graded to new division'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries.
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