Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In majority of nations, vaccations of student of elementary, middle and hight schlos last for two months or can be extended further. There are several reasons why schools provide long holidays and the reason why holidays should last for a month or for shorter span will be illustrated in the upcoming paragaphers.

The primary reason why most of the countries provide long holidays to their students because of harsh summer heat. As some countries are near the equator due to which they had to face intance heat and humity.To avoid students from suffering in this instance hot environment, long holidays are provides. while other nations where heat is not much but still offer's long vaccations because they believe it is the best way how students can refresh their brains and spend more time with their family , also can spend some time in extra-curricular activities which is quit diffcult to manage during schooling period. These kind of countries donot believe in make students just a bookworm but helps them to keep up in other aspects of life.

On the other hand, vaccations must be short especially in those nations where heat is not much because one month is sufficient to relax their minds but if

this period will be extended it is more likely that children will became lazy and even will avoid doing study beacuse they had spend long time in their comfort zone. It is also proven scientifically that if an individuals brain is not used effectively for long time they are more likely to perform worse and its effect are also visible on the very first of school because some students even forget how to write. So , holidays must be short.

In conclusion, there are several reasons why countries provide long vaccation that is due to intance heat and also to allow childrens to refresh their brains but these holidays must be short because students became lazy and dull after spending alot of time in their confort zone. they are likely to forget the work done previously.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the 'comfort zone' and 'laziness' arguments in the second and third body paragraphs. While the ideas are relevant, they could be more deeply explored with specific examples or more nuanced reasoning. The introduction and conclusion are present, but the overall structure is slightly simplistic. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with distinct supporting details rather than restating the same concept in different words.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion', but some transitions feel mechanical or slightly forced. There are instances where referencing is unclear, such as the use of 'these kind of countries' or 'its effect are also visible'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main arguments. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their intended antecedents to improve the flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks sophistication. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'vaccations', 'hight schlos', 'paragaphers', 'intance', and 'confort'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'extra-curricular activities' and 'comfort zone', the overall lexical control is limited. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to focus on accurate spelling and expanding their range of academic collocations to express ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('holidays is provides', 'offer's long vaccations', 'individuals brain is not used'), incorrect pluralisation ('childrens'), and awkward phrasing ('how students can refresh their brains'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and plural forms would be highly beneficial.

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