Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In numerous nations, the summer holidays provided in the primary and secondary schools lasts for two months or more.
Students need these necessary holidays to relax their minds and give rest to their bodies after studying for such a long academic period.
On the one hand, longer summer vacations provide students to give break to their studies and enjoy with their families and closed ones. They can relax and participate in other activities including physical. Children can take place in summer camps and learn new things such as paiting, sketching, dancing and singing. There co-curricular activities helps students stay productive and enhance their inter-personal skills aswell as boost their mental abilities.
On the other hand, shorter school holidays are not sufficient for the students to maintain productivity. If they have shorter vacation, they cannot tracel to their native and spend time with their relatives and closed ones. Shorter
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 148 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you identify some benefits of long holidays, the second part of the prompt—arguments in favour of shorter holidays—is left incomplete and abruptly ends mid-sentence. The ideas presented are underdeveloped, and the lack of a conclusion or a fully balanced discussion significantly impacts the score. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with sufficient depth and that the essay reaches the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization through the use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'. However, the progression is severely hampered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is unfinished, which disrupts the overall flow. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the lack of a concluding paragraph prevents the essay from having a clear, coherent structure. To improve, focus on completing your arguments and using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. There are some errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'paiting' instead of 'painting' and 'tracel' instead of 'travel'. Phrases like 'give break to their studies' and 'closed ones' (referring to family) are slightly unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and ensure you proofread for spelling errors. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to education and child development would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'provide students to give break' (should be 'provide students with a break') and 'There co-curricular activities helps' (should be 'These co-curricular activities help'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the presence of frequent errors limit the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and then introduce more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences.
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