Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In many countries, Both primary and secondary schools have to provide two months or more for the summer holidays. I completely agree to schools should close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
children should have long school holidays. At long holidays students can learn with facing difficulty in some subjects. By the way they can spend some time with family members and can get some suggestions about their studies. They can get some stress free with exams and studies by spending time with friends and family. For example, By watching movies or spending time with friends and family can get some stress relief from without any tensions of exams.
Children can face different problems with long holidays. So many people argued for favour of shorter holidays because students can face problems with learning continuity by having long holidays can affect students to forget what they have learned as well as It affects their time table. By having long holidays it may affect on their exams and results. For Example, After a long holidays if schools have conducts any tests. For sure, the students exam results may effect as compared to previous.
In conclusion, Students have two months or more in the summer holidays to get stress relief with exams also can spend some time with family members and relatives. It provides students to get some relaxation from every day teachings and tests.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development is limited. The ideas are somewhat repetitive, and the essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the depth of the argument. The position is clear, but the supporting examples are underdeveloped and lack specific detail. To improve, you should expand on your points with more thorough explanations and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'By having' or 'For example' at the start of sentences. The logical progression between ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between the benefits of holidays and the drawbacks is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would greatly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'get some stress relief' and 'face problems' are used multiple times, which limits the range of your expression. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'schools have conducts any tests' and 'the students exam results may effect'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items, and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'I completely agree to schools should close' and 'it may affect on their exams'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and word forms (e.g., 'effect' instead of 'affect'). These errors are frequent and sometimes cause difficulty for the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and then work on incorporating a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy.
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