Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In number of countries primary and secondary give vacation of two months on summer season it is good because the temperature is very high in the days student can not bear the heat in this essay i will discuss both long school holiday value and also give arguments about in favour of shorter school vacation.

first of all i will talk about value of long school holiday it has many benefits like student go to school all the year they become bore in this era of vacation they become relax and the other benefit is that this season of vacation is of summer these are the hot day youngsters cannot bear this heat this heat cause heat stoke this long school holiday is important for primary schools not for secondary school this may lead to the loss of studies of secondary school students .

On the the other side i also give arguments about the shorter school holidays my opinion is that there should be shorter school holiday for secondary schools i think the time of school should be reduced but not a long term holiday or the other thing is that in less vacations the students do their work in relax form because when the vacations are near the teacher complete their class sylublls in speed if the vacations are shorter the teacher give a work to student in regular class way .

in conclusion ,in long school holidays the student have a lose of their studies on the other side i agree with short term holiday because in this student should not be pressurize by the burden of work .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For example, the argument regarding heat is mentioned twice without significant expansion. The position is generally clear, but the reasoning is often simplistic, such as the claim that secondary students lose out on studies while primary students do not. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of the educational and social impacts of holiday lengths rather than focusing primarily on weather conditions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'first of all' and 'on the other side'. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple terms like 'good', 'bad', 'work', and 'vacation'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'give vacation of two months', 'become bore', and 'class sylublls'. Spelling errors, such as 'sylublls' (syllabus) and 'pressurize' (pressured), are also present. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education and academic scheduling, and pay closer attention to word forms and standard English collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in number of countries'), subject-verb agreement issues ('student go to school'), and incorrect verb forms ('teacher give a work'). Punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and a lack of proper sentence boundaries. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors and the lack of complex grammatical structures prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors.

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