Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this contemporary world, educational institutes have remain closed for a specific period of time. Some people believe that these long vacations are good necessary for the children's refreshment, while thare are also others who argue that it makes children lazy and frustrated. I fimly think that it is essential for children to have some break from study, so that they can learn some new activity and visit to another places to enjoy their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 75 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. While you have introduced the topic and stated a personal position, the body paragraphs required to explore the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones are entirely missing. To achieve a higher band, you must develop each part of the prompt with supporting arguments and relevant examples. Currently, the response is too brief to demonstrate the ability to develop a coherent argument, which severely limits the score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response consists of a single short paragraph. There is no evidence of paragraphing or logical progression between ideas. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'while' and 'so that', the lack of length prevents the development of a cohesive structure. To improve, you need to organize your response into clear paragraphs, with each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt, and use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'educational institutes' and 'visit to another places' show limited control. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'good necessary' (a redundancy) and 'visit to another places' (grammatical error). To improve, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to education and time management, and ensure that your word choices are natural and accurate. The current range is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are several grammatical errors in this short text. For example, 'educational institutes have remain closed' should be 'have remained closed', and 'thare are' is a spelling error. The sentence structure is simple, and there is no evidence of complex sentence forms. To improve, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency. Furthermore, you should practice incorporating complex structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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