Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
These days, there is an ongoing debate among people in many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two or more in the summer holidays. While, it is possible to claim that this eassy will discuss the pros and cons of the sbove statement which relates to vocations, using the good approach.
There are sevral rasons in favor of my stance. On of the most important point is that the value of longer holidays are necassary for student. because it is really enjoyable time for them. They spent this time with there family members. In this time, they plays game, watching movies and enjoy family picnic. The season of holidays are really times of happiness because they get rise of from daily boring routine of school life. With its wide range of advantages thus eassy can not only one's effectiveness but also improve the productivity and quality of there life with great convince.
On the other hand, the arguments in favor of shorter school holidays. According to my point of view shorter holidays have many benifits for students and schools both. If schools close for very short time then schools complete their syllabus early. Then they held the daily test session which helps the student prepration. So, they can perfor better if their syllabus early.
Consequently, it is undeniable that longer holidays are enjoyable time for students temprory. While, longer holidays are benifical for students and schools to get better result.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The essay is also under the 250-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the depth of the argument. The introduction is poorly constructed, failing to clearly paraphrase the prompt or state a clear position. The arguments provided are somewhat superficial, lacking specific examples or logical expansion. To improve, you should aim to provide more detailed explanations for your points and ensure you meet the word count to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'On the other hand', 'Consequently'), they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not enhance the logical progression of the argument. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. The structure of the sentences within paragraphs is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought clearly. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms such as 'enjoyable', 'time', and 'good'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'sevral', 'rasons', 'necassary', 'benifits', and 'prepration'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, restrict the ability to convey ideas with precision. To achieve a higher band score, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms and focus on accurate spelling. The current range is barely adequate for the task, and the frequent errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'value of longer holidays are necassary'), tense consistency, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In this time, they plays game'). Many sentences are simple or contain errors that make them difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is often misused. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of complex sentences to add variety to your writing.
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