Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this technology time, education is very important for every child. And the government also provide free education to every child in their country. So many countries school close their primary and secondary school for two months or more in summer holidays. This essay discuss causes behind the development and suggest possible solutions in the following paragraphs.
On one hand, When the school gives students long holidays so some times their syllabus not covered and some time they not aware about such important topic. In addition, when student had long vacation they are very bored and some students waste their time in long vacation and did not develop and learning skill which is helped in their future. And after the long vacation student did not focused in their studies.
On other hand, When student have long holidays they spent their time with family and friends, they enjoy with them and planning a holiday trip. Some students use their long vacation while developing new skills and learning new topics about technology that is helped in their future life. And during the long vacation that is also useful for teacher also, they got a break in during holidays.
In conclusion, long vacation is important when we do not waste our time in playing video games or etc but when we improve our self in vacation and learning such new things which help in our future so school holidays is better.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The introduction incorrectly states that the essay will discuss 'causes' and 'solutions', whereas the prompt asks for the 'value' of holidays and 'arguments in favour of shorter holidays'. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and repetitive. The word count is below the 250-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop ideas. The arguments provided are superficial, and the essay lacks a clear, consistent position. To improve, ensure you directly answer the specific questions asked and provide detailed, logical explanations for each point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'And' to start sentences. Referencing is often unclear; for instance, the phrase 'that is also useful for teacher also' lacks a clear antecedent. The transition between the two sides of the argument is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'conversely') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'important', 'good', and 'time'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'learning skill which is helped in their future' and 'did not focused'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and precise terminology related to education and time management, while also paying closer attention to word forms and parts of speech.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'school close', 'student had long vacation'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors in complex construction, such as 'when student have long holidays they spent their time'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using consistent verb tenses throughout your writing. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and pluralisation is essential.
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