Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It has long been a subject of discussion weather in many countries, primary and secondary schools are closed for two months in summers holidays. In this essay, the formal notion has several elements, that deserve attention and I am partly agree with long time holiday in primary schools. Which i will elaborate the upcoming paragraph before reaching a concrete conclusion.

To commence, one of the many countries have too much hot days and long terms summers. To clear it precisely in primary schools have small age groups children's they have bad effects on health in summer. Moreover, long term holidays in summers have perfect days to school boys to rest and fun in summers day after come school they are feel like fresh and energetic. For instance, recent research suggest that many countries summers have too much hot days recently i see news some Europe countries like Germany too much hot days. Which highlighted the importance of in summers school provide good work and activities they improve our mind and skills. Hence, in summers school provide online classes at home.

Moving on further long term holidays in primary and secondary schools is not good because many students are not study at home. To elaborate it, long holidays are bad effects on daily routine on students like daily work. Furthermore, they long term holidays turn into short time holidays is best because secondary schools students are big in age compare to primary school they are easily survive in summer they have not big impact on health. For instance according to recent survey that was conducted by 55% of people were really happy with short term holidays. There fore collaboration with government, corporation and citizens are ensure the unified approach to combat long term holidays main problem is effects on mind and daily play video games effect on study this is the main issue.

To sum up, primary and secondary school long term holidays has bad effect on study that should be considered by carefully. In this future will be important to long term to short term holiday is good for students. So that it can bring positive outcomes for both individual society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention health concerns and the need for rest, the arguments are often repetitive or lack logical depth. For instance, the point about online classes in summer is introduced but not explained in relation to the prompt. The position is generally clear, but the lack of precise vocabulary and structural control makes the arguments feel underdeveloped. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea supported by a specific, well-explained example rather than listing several loosely connected points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To commence' and 'Moving on further', they are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Which highlighted the importance of in summers school provide good work'. The progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on using cohesive devices to link ideas logically rather than just starting sentences with transition words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'weather' instead of 'whether', 'small age groups children's', and 'easily survive in summer'. Some phrases are non-idiomatic, such as 'school boys to rest and fun'. The range is sufficient to communicate basic meaning, but the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'there fore') indicate a need for a broader and more accurate vocabulary base to express academic arguments effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many countries have too much hot days'), sentence fragments, and incorrect word order. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'In this future will be important to long term to short term holiday is good for students' is grammatically incoherent. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent throughout the text.

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