Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many countries, Primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

- What is the value of long school holidays?

- What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays.

- One question that has caused a great deal of controversy is whether authorities should establish practical measures into the educational syllabus to ensure the primary and secondary school students obtain an adequate amount of time for recreation, enrichment of knowledge about nature and different cultures, and physical activity to enforce their general well being.

On the one hand, the importance of prolonged summer vacation cannot be disregarded, as the primary reason for the summer holiday is to ensure that students have refreshed their minds and recharged for the next academic year. Summer recess allows pupils to allocate more time for lesiure activities such as playing chess and painting, which satisfies their curisity and engagement. Moreover, the investigation of natural environment can serve as the most significant can serve as the most significat feature of development, as students will enrich their knowledge about diveragent customs and culturess, securing their spiritual enhancement. The last but not the least, summer holidays supply an extended time for maintaining students physical well being, as people engage themselves with swimming, jogging and hiking the likelihood of obesity- based illnesses starts to strunk.

On the other hand, extended summer vacation may distract student's attention from being engaged with their studies. Extended duration of the academic year allows students to finish the academic curriculum at faster pace. Further more, as academic performance becomes indespensible in students daily lives, they can build stronger relationships with their techers, fostering them to percieve more detailed feedback of their achievemants and performance.

Ultimately, all things considered, states should implement balanced prectical policies to ensure that

Students improve their awareness of nature, cultures and traditions sports and hobbies along with msintaining excellent academic perfomance, taking into consideration student's phycological and mental well-being.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The first body paragraph provides clear benefits of long holidays, such as leisure and physical health. The second paragraph regarding shorter holidays is less developed, focusing primarily on academic curriculum pace rather than broader social or economic arguments. The introduction is problematic as it includes the prompt's questions verbatim rather than paraphrasing them, and the conclusion is fragmented and incomplete, which limits the overall clarity of the position. To reach a higher band, ensure all arguments are fully extended with specific examples and maintain a consistent, formal tone throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand,' 'Moreover,' and 'Ultimately.' However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, the transition 'The last but not the least' is non-standard, and the final paragraph is a sentence fragment that fails to provide a cohesive summary. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the lack of a complete concluding sentence and some repetitive sentence structures hinder the overall coherence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, complete structure would enhance the score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task, with attempts to use topic-specific terms like 'recreation,' 'enrichment,' and 'academic curriculum.' However, there are several spelling errors ('lesiure,' 'curisity,' 'diveragent,' 'culturess,' 'indespensible,' 'techers,' 'prectical,' 'msintaining') and some awkward collocations ('obesity-based illnesses starts to strunk'). These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent understanding. To improve, you should focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and expanding your use of more precise academic collocations. The current range is sufficient to convey meaning but lacks the precision and accuracy required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'the likelihood of obesity-based illnesses starts to strunk' and 'fostering them to percieve more detailed feedback of their achievemants.' Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence boundaries, particularly in the final paragraph where the text trails off. Frequent minor errors in subject-verb agreement and word formation are present. To achieve a higher score, focus on mastering complex sentence construction and reducing the frequency of basic grammatical slips.

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