Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is well established fact that, education is most important thing in life and it's gives us respect in our society.however,some people in many countries,primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.nevertheless,some people arguments in favour of Short school holidays.health and wealth also important in everyone's life.accirding to climate and seasons to think the students humidity and health conditions for attending the school.in somsy in India still we like to give for 2 months holidays in summer season for weather conditions and the think for upgrading the previous.onthewhole my opinion is and my support for short holidays for schools and we discusse the following paragraphs and reach a reasonable conclusion.

On the one hand, mostly countries are giving a long time period holidays which means summer holidays.usually in middle of the march and may months are very hot and heat climate in our area ,if we conduct and allow the students to the school it causes the lose of the child lifes.education is important but not more the life.

On the other hand , short leaving the schools is better for the students,for remembering the concepts and fast to learn.at school age it's very easy to forget all the things and as well as learning aslo.they are very actively participating every situations and every subjects because of there are in track and not much long and gap with learning and writing,it's like even sharp knife also rusted when didn't use . learn the more things through continue leaning.

In the summary,my openion is holiday is a break for continuous studies and work ,it gives us relaxation and stree bruster .my support for short holidays are better for schools and to maintain the health also main thing in education industry.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The position is stated but lacks depth, and some arguments, such as the mention of 'humidity' and 'health conditions', are not clearly explained or linked to the educational context. The response relies on general statements rather than well-supported arguments or specific examples, which prevents it from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on expanding each point with clear reasoning and illustrative examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor sentence structure and unclear transitions. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In the summary', these are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several instances of word-choice errors that hinder clarity, such as 'heat climate' instead of 'hot climate' and 'stree bruster' (stress buster). There is a lack of academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay. Many phrases are awkward or non-idiomatic, such as 'education industry' or 'short leaving the schools'. To improve, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary, focusing on collocations and more precise terminology related to education and social issues.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'It is well established fact that, education is most important thing in life and it's gives us respect'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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