Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As it is an argue that in numerous countries primary and secondary schools remain off for 60 or more than 60 days after the spring season for the hot days vacations.

Although, there are many benefits of long day holidays but also it have ,many disadvantages. Firstly we discuss about the advantages of long school holidays. In the warm countries especially in Asia there is a long period of holidays in summer season. The temperature in June, July and some days of August is above 45 degree centigrade. This increase in temperature has badly effects on humans, plants and other animals. In human above 40 degree, some ultraviolet rays of sun could cause the skin cancer. So, institutes remain off during that span of time. In this period of time, some students spend the the time with family, friends and relatives.

Now we discuss about disadvantages of school holidays. The main disadvantages is student go to their relative home and waste a lot of time and do some bad and unusual sexual activities, this probably effect on their health. Some students lose a previous memory. Consequently, the syllabus of children do not complete in n

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you identify the value of holidays (health/safety due to extreme heat) and mention arguments for shorter holidays (academic loss), the points are under-developed and the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. To improve, you must ensure you fully address both parts of the prompt with sufficient supporting detail and reach the required length. The lack of a conclusion and the unfinished nature of the argument prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Consequently', but the overall structure is weak. Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow is disrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'This probably effect on their health', where the antecedent is vague. The progression of ideas is hindered by the abrupt ending, making it difficult to follow a coherent argument throughout the piece.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'badly effects' (incorrect collocation) and 'waste a lot of time'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'long day holidays' and 'relative home'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the range is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. You should focus on learning more precise collocations and academic vocabulary to improve your ability to discuss abstract topics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'As it is an argue that', 'it have ,many disadvantages', and 'the syllabus of children do not complete'. Sentence structures are predominantly simple, and there is a lack of control over complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and missing full stops. Improving your grasp of subject-verb agreement and sentence construction is essential for higher band scores.

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