Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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Arguments for School hodidays , is are burgeoning day-by-day. Some degree of masses reikon that there should be about 2 or more than two months vacations in schools for summer. while other The longer as well as shorter one have their own values and. there are number of statements that are preferred short-period holidays for school.

The primary factor that need to be taken into consideration is that, what are the benefits for long school hodidays ? Holidays Vacations, wether it is for summer or for winter season it is generally for small little relaxation among students. To make it more clear, students get fed-up by of monotonous daily or routined study which also affects their interest in studies or in schools. So during the long-term holiday [about 2-3 monts] children are free from daily

school- going activitys and able to enjoy their quality time with their familyes and feiends. And another reason behind this is in extreme summers and winters, vary nation to nation is due to high tempreature. Nowadays, ozone layer is jetty depleted due to fossil fuel and petroleum vehicles that result as high heat and this also effect on kids to make them ill. Schools are closed for safety purposes for long period. Climate changes are the driven Noteworthy, some people are in the favor of shorter school break, because mostly the parents of children. Because, they want that there most of parents are working and busy in their own life and have lack of time for their children. In this manner, they want that kids should spend more and more time in schools so that parents can do their own job work. And, one more reason for favouring in short-term holiday that is shortage of knowledge. For example, if a toddler remains at home for 2 months without any homework or not any kind of study then

it will lose the eficiency of children to concentrate on study as earlier.

All in all, of a foresaid, benefits for longer period vacations and reasons behind interest in short time holidays are depend on the situation of student and its family members.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the value of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the points regarding student relaxation and parental work schedules are relevant, the explanation of the ozone layer and climate change is somewhat tangential and not clearly linked to the primary value of school holidays. The position is generally clear, but the lack of a strong, cohesive argument structure prevents it from reaching a higher band. The ideas are present but require more logical expansion and better focus on the core educational and social implications.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently mechanical or misused, such as 'In this manner' or 'All in all, of a foresaid'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the benefits of long holidays and the arguments for shorter ones feels abrupt. The paragraphing is present, but the internal logic of the arguments is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of smooth, logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'masses reikon', 'routined study', and 'jetty depleted'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'eficiency' and 'activitys'. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the high frequency of spelling errors and inappropriate word choices occasionally makes the meaning difficult to follow. A wider range of precise, academic vocabulary is needed to convey ideas effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is low. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Arguments for School hodidays , is are'), incorrect punctuation, and fragmented sentences. The use of articles and prepositions is often inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing and requires more attention to detail.

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