Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Education regarding as a fundamental pillar on comunity in all the world. The education institution in many contries give learners a long trem vacation in summer. Individuals must be aware of the value of long school holidays.

Firstly, pupils who need to study for long time all the year, and this make learn new education skills harder by time because they get tired. The summer vacation make them enable to gain new skills after it. further more, students do not require to the school skills only on them life, they need to claim more skills outside the school. In a new studies, reaserch found that students who often hate going to school, get excited to join them classes after the summer holiday.

Although long vacation has some positive affectes on the formal education, there is an opposit orientation that said learners do not need to long vacation and shorter school holidays is suffisent for them, for example in China, the system of education there is so much hard than many other system, but it is amoung the the most succefull aproach in the world. Undergraduates there spend most of them journey on studying, while the holidays are not longer compared with many other contries.

In my opinion, long holidays specificly in summer is somthing vital to make the education formal success in most contries in the world. ghive youngs a break from the school is the best stratigy to make them love it.

I conclusion, long holidays affect by many benefits on most system education in the world, but it is not always essnetial to make the system achieve the object in that contry.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the value of long school holidays and the arguments in favour of shorter ones, whilst also stating a clear personal opinion. The writer presents relevant ideas, such as students gaining outside skills and avoiding burnout, as well as counterarguments referencing systems like China's where shorter holidays coexist with academic success. However, some of these ideas remain slightly under-developed and lack extended examples. For instance, the mention of China is brief and could have been elaborated to strengthen the argumentation. Despite this limitation, the overall response covers the prompt adequately, earning a Band 6.0 according to the descriptors for addressing all parts of the task with relevant, if sometimes under-developed, ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, including an introduction, body paragraphs addressing both sides of the argument, a personal opinion, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices and transition markers are used, such as 'Firstly', 'further more', 'Although', and 'In conclusion'. However, cohesion is at times faulty or mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'the system of education there is so much hard than many other system'. Paragraph transitions could be smoother, and some sentences lack logical continuity. Overall, the organizational structure is adequate to earn a Band 5.5, reflecting a mix of clear overarching progression alongside noticeable mechanical or repetitive cohesive errors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for an academic essay, using terms such as 'fundamental pillar', 'vacation', 'undergraduates', and 'strategy'. However, there is a significant number of spelling, word-choice, and morphological errors throughout the text, including 'comunity', 'contries', 'long trem', 'effectes', 'opposit orientation', 'suffisent', 'amoung', 'succefull', 'aproach', 'specificly', 'somthing', 'ghive', 'youngs', 'stratigy', 'I conclusion', and 'essnetial'. These inaccuracies demonstrate a limited control of word formation and spelling. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic meaning of the prompt, the density of lexical errors places this response firmly at Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and subordinate structures like 'pupils who need to study' and 'students who often hate going to school'. However, the text contains a high frequency of grammatical and punctuation errors that impede fluency and sometimes strain comprehension. Notable errors include 'Education regarding as a fundamental pillar', 'this make learn new education skills harder', 'students do not require to the school skills only on them life', and 'the system of education there is so much hard'. Subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and verb forms are frequently mishandled. Because these frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and accurate complex sentences are scarce, the grammar aligns with Band 5.0.

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