Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Holidays is the best part of school life, thus every student have right to spend quality time with their family and fun, that is why holidays is neccesary part for childerns life.

To begin with, in many countries the primary and secondary school are closed for just two monts, i think thats not fair with students because education is not the easy task. In addition to, the primary and secondry classes are tough and students may feel stress about course because the clasees remains countinue for eight mounts of the year and that is the huge task to do with consistency. For example, A student have no time for activities and he was studied hard so maybe he fall ill during this time period and he also compromised his sleep cycle so those factors which must be noticeable.

On the other hand, if we start conversation about shorter school holidays, in my opinion that are benifical for those students who's are weak in the academic performance. Furthermore, the academic institutions must develop programs for poor students which will be improveing their basics for learning in summer vocations.For instance, if a student did not performs well in classroom and ignored by teacher between normal days. If he will join the summer vocation program it would be favourable for him and that is how, students have not much holidays and they are also improves their learning skills.

In conclustion, in my prospective those students who's worked hard in study time they have right for three mounts holidays and those students who's performance are bad in study must be joined summer vocations for improvement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt, discussing both the value of long holidays (spending quality time with family, avoiding stress) and the arguments for shorter ones (helping academically weak students through remedial programs). However, the ideas are presented in a somewhat simplistic and repetitive manner. For instance, the points about stress and poor academic performance are touched upon but lack deep extension or fully realized examples. The position is discernible throughout the essay, leaning towards a balanced perspective, though the development of arguments is limited by superficial explanations and occasional tangential thoughts. This level of task response aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, reflecting a basic organizational structure. Transitional phrases like 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclustion' are used to signal shifts between ideas, though these devices are sometimes applied mechanically. Overall progression is hindered by choppy sentences and abrupt shifts in focus, particularly within body paragraph one where thoughts regarding sleep cycles and illness are tacked on without smooth integration. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun 'he' used ambiguously in sentences like 'if a student did not performs well in classroom and ignored by teacher between normal days'. Cohesion within sentences requires better management to achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice and spelling errors that reflect a limited range. Examples of spelling inaccuracies include 'neccesary', 'childerns', 'monts', 'cleasees', 'mounts', 'benifical', 'vocations' (for vacations), and 'conclustion'. Furthermore, lexical phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'education is not the easy task' and 'start conversation about shorter school holidays'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic gist of the writer's arguments, the accumulation of errors throughout the text keeps this criterion at a Band 4.5 level, rounded to 5.0 in accordance with standard practice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily restricted. While there are a few attempts at complex sentences using conjunctions like 'because' and 'if', these structures are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include 'every student have right' (subject-verb agreement), 'the primary and secondary school are closed' (plurality mismatch), 'students who's are weak' (incorrect use of possessive form instead of relative pronoun), and 'students who's worked hard'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences lacking proper demarcation. Because errors occur consistently across simple and complex forms and occasionally impede smooth reading, the writing sits comfortably within the Band 4 descriptor range.

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