Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Yes in many countries primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer because in many countires i know in my personal experience in my village the weather is too chalenging sometimes and we have difficulty yo rwach school and in my village there are many rivers located in my village which flow increases because of raining and sometimes thundres also that's why we have more than two holydays and like in anothers country in my opinion in child need some time to break from studies and they need time to relax but there is also problem in longer holidays is that because of long time holiday child will forgot to study and its affect there study which affects there future .in opnion the holidays should for shorter period it will benefits the both ways the chils gets time enjoy vacation and break form study for short period of time and it will not affects there studies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of holidays (relaxing and breaking from studies) and the arguments for shorter holidays (forgetting academic material). However, the length requirement is severely compromised, containing only 161 words compared to the minimum of 250 words. This leads to under-developed ideas and a lack of proper support and examples. Because the minimum length requirement is not met, the task achievement score is directly impacted, preventing the response from achieving a passing grade.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text suffers from a major lack of paragraphing, appearing as one continuous, unbroken block of text. Cohesive devices are repetitive and basic, relying heavily on connector words like 'because' and 'and'. There are long run-on sentences that make it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. Although there is a discernible overarching structure moving from the value of holidays to the arguments for shorter breaks, the mechanical nature of the cohesion and the absence of clear paragraph divisions keep the coherence score at a low band.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as 'children', 'study', 'holidays', and 'village'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'chalenging', 'yo rwach' (to reach), 'thundres', 'holydays', 'anothers country', 'child will forgot', and 'opnion'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple ideas, but the frequency of lexical errors causes noticeable strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures are extremely basic, dominated by simple sentences joined haphazardly by conjunctions. There is a complete lack of punctuation, resulting in long, sprawling run-on sentences with no periods or commas to separate clauses. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are present, such as 'child need' and 'it will affects'. Control over basic sentence mechanics is weak, which significantly impedes communication.

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