Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the present era, many elementary and seconday education schools of different countries are providing the large number of school holidays, especially in summer and winter seasons.There has been a growing concern about this factor, that this prolonged period is benefical for student or not. And, either it should be reduced. Both have their own advantages and disadvantages.

Nowadays, many European countries has implemented a new law regarding their education policy, which is like they will close their institutions for more than two months in the winter period. Owing to this, students get a benefits to focus on their Co-curricular activities in their leisure time. For example, activities such as basketball, football and other recreational things will improve their cognitive and physical abilities. They can utilise this period for travelling with their family members and learn about different cultures. It will give them an opportunity to explore their creativity, like in which other subjects they are interested and how they can improve their skills and knowledge. It could be very beneficial for the secoundary group students, they can get a part time job opportunities or they can participates in some events, where they get to learn about volunteering and time management skills.

On the other hand, some childrens missue this vacation on some irresponsible things like playing video games and watch movies. Due to these, they can face a medical problems like continously monitoring on the screen and not going outside. They should also face the obesity issue. Because of this long holidays, they sometimes lost their contacts with their close friends and feeling depressed when living in a home.

In conclusion, it should be managed properly like if education centres are closed for long months then they should organize online classes or seminars, which is related to interpersonally skills for them.so that they can stay connected with the faculties members

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, examining both the value of long school holidays and the arguments in favour of shorter ones. The writer clearly outlines the advantages, such as engagement in co-curricular activities and travel, alongside disadvantages, including screen time, health issues, and social isolation. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed and lack extension. For instance, the mention of part-time jobs and volunteering is introduced briefly without much elaboration. The position of the writer is apparent throughout, and the main tenets of the prompt are covered satisfactorily, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a clear overall arrangement with logical paragraphing, separating the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, 'Both have their own advantages and disadvantages' lacks a clear antecedent in the preceding sentence, and the final sentence of the conclusion is a fragmented run-on structure ('...for them.so that they can stay connected...'). Paragraph sequencing is logical, but the transitions between sentences can feel abrupt at times, keeping the response at a Band 6 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student displays an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'co-curricular activities', 'cognitive and physical abilities', and 'volunteering'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'seconday' instead of secondary, 'benefical' instead of beneficial, 'missue' instead of misuse, and 'interpersonally skills' instead of interpersonal skills. Collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'playing video games and watch movies' or 'face a medical problems like continously monitoring on the screen'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, reflecting the characteristics of Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some ambitious structures like conditional and relative clauses ('like in which other subjects they are interested'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('many European countries has implemented'), article misuse ('get a benefits'), preposition problems ('living in a home'), and tense inconsistencies. Punctuation is also flawed, particularly with comma splices and run-on sentences in the conclusion. Although the errors are noticeable, they rarely impede overall understanding, making Band 5.5 or a solid Band 6 appropriate, though leaning towards Band 5.5 due to the density of basic structural and agreement errors.

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