Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In most of the countries,primary and secondary educational institutes are off for eight weeks or more during summers for holidays.

To begin with, there are many setbacks of longer holidays. such as, individuals feel relax and they do not focus on their studies and spend their time playing games, watching movies and also sleep late at night. Moreover,few scholars will adopt bad habits during holidays because they do not have work to do thats why they will get bore at home and join bad company which can spoil them. For instance, they can be victim of smoking or may fall prey to drug abuse. Furthermore, their daily routine gets disturb and cause weekness.

Secondly, the government should reduce duration of holidays and also arrange summer camp programmes which should promote healthy curicullar and co curicullar activities during holidays because it will be beneficial for scholars in many ways. Moreover, parents should also focous on their kids and give them time and do not snub them all the time. Furthermore, parents should encourage their young ones to learn a new skill which will be beneficial for them in future and also useful in their professional life. The government, should also provide online educational app which will also essential for scholars.

Conclusion, the government should reduce the time period of holidays. Otherwise, given the facilities to kids. Such as, online educational app, online tutor and summer camp activities which will encourage the children to focus on studies. But parents should also play role for their kids give proper time and also discuss with them about their daily routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding the value of long school holidays and arguments in favour of shorter ones, but the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. The introduction briefly touches upon the duration of holidays, and the body paragraphs discuss potential negative consequences like boredom and adopting bad habits, as well as solutions such as summer camps and online apps. However, the first prompt question regarding the positive 'value' of long holidays is only vaguely alluded to rather than fully explored, as the student quickly shifts into the drawbacks. Furthermore, the position is not always clearly sustained throughout, leading to an overall score at the Band 5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some basic organisational structure with attempts at paragraphing and transitional phrases such as 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'Conclusion'. However, overall progression is lacking, and the paragraphing conventions are somewhat weak—for instance, the concluding paragraph begins abruptly with 'Conclusion,' and the body paragraphs mix arguments and recommendations confusingly. Cohesive devices are often used mechanically or inaccurately, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'Given the facilities to kids. Such as, online educational app...'). These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple words like 'scholars', 'kids', 'things', and 'good/bad'. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as 'feel relax' instead of 'relaxed', 'get bore' instead of 'bored', and 'weekness' instead of 'weakness'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas, the limitations and errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex attempts are flawed by punctuation errors, fragment sentences, and grammatical inaccuracies. Examples include '...thats why they will get bore at home and join bad company which can spoil them', '...get disturb and cause weekness', and the incomplete sentence fragment 'Conclusion, the government should reduce the time period of holidays.' Frequent errors in tense consistency, prepositions, and sentence boundaries cause distraction and occasional difficulty for the reader, indicating a Band 5 performance.

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