Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

primary or secondry schools clos for two or long time in the holidays. i will sa that the for students specially thee have good opportunity to utilize there time because they have to gt some more information or learning some skills like wordpress wb dvelopment graphic designing or in th other field gardning and somthing like that. and the long holidays lik two months its also enough for to learn somthing else.

and in the short break of holidays i think in my opinion thy just doing some refreeshment spending some short quality time with family and also go some other places as tourist like that.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, coming in at only 106 words. This severely limits the development of ideas. While the writer briefly touches upon the value of long holidays in terms of learning new skills like 'wordpress wb dvelopment', the explanation is underdeveloped and lacks specific examples or full expansion. Furthermore, the second prompt regarding arguments in favour of shorter holidays is only addressed very superficially ('just doing some refreeshment spending some short quality time with family'). Due to the significant under-length penalty and lack of full task coverage, the response aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from poor structural organisation and a lack of proper paragraphing, being presented as two disorganised blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or rudimentary, relying heavily on simple connectors like 'and' or repetitive phrasing. There is no clear logical progression of ideas from an introduction through body paragraphs to a conclusion. Referencing is also confusing at times, such as ambiguous pronoun usage. These structural and cohesive weaknesses place the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous severe spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'secondry', 'clos', 'thee', 'there' instead of their, 'wb', 'gardning', 'refreeshment'). While the student attempts some less common topic-related vocabulary like 'wordpress wb dvelopment' and 'graphic designing', the pervasive spelling and word-choice errors significantly strain the reader and impede comprehension. This performance corresponds to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, simplistic sentences with frequent structural faults. There are major issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and punctuation (e.g., 'i will sa that the for students specially thee have good opportunity', 'long holidays lik two months its also enough'). Errors are frequent across almost every sentence and often distort the intended meaning, matching the criteria for Band 4.0.

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