Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some countries, minor and subordinate education insituite shut down for eight weeks or more in the summer vacations. It is most longer holidays and they are many values of schools and other educational system don't long time close in the summer break.

On the one hand, some people believe that summer breaks most important every countries. However, some public can not agree that with the statement. Also, some humman beings totaly waste the time long summer holidays. Because, they are believe that longer education breaks badly impact in the students, while, some teenager spent more time social media or other device. For instance, mostly student waste more time use the social media scrol the entertainment videos.

On the other hand, some folk believe that long education insituite minor and higher summer breaks most important some countries. Furthermore, some countries argue that the good things provied the educational system, many countries offer a guidance intorduce the diffrent skills. As a reuslt, they can provide

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 163 words. This severely limits task completion. Furthermore, the essay addresses the prompt only partially and fails to develop a coherent argument. While the writer attempts to introduce both sides regarding the value of long summer holidays and arguments for shorter breaks, the ideas remain highly underdeveloped, repetitive, and unclear. For example, the sentence 'Because, they are believe that longer education breaks badly impact in the students' lacks adequate explanation or supporting examples. Consequently, the position of the writer is unclear, and the overall development of the task falls short of Band 5 expectations due to the significant under-length penalty and lack of fully formed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The coherence and cohesion of the response are significantly impaired by poor paragraph structure, abrupt endings, and faulty mechanical linking. Although the writer attempts to use traditional transition markers such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', their misuse disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence ('As a reuslt, they can provide'). Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between sentences. Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged in a sufficiently coherent manner to achieve a higher band, reflecting Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and repetitive, with numerous vocabulary errors that frequently impede communication. The student relies heavily on inappropriate word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'minor and subordinate education insituite' instead of educational institutions, and 'humman beings' instead of people. Other non-standard phrases like 'scrol the entertainment videos' demonstrate a very limited control of word formation and spelling. While there are a few attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'insituite' and 'guidance', these are undermined by incorrect spelling and inaccurate usage. This performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptor where basic vocabulary and frequent errors strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical range and accuracy are extremely weak, featuring a very limited range of structures and frequent, persistent errors that often distort meaning. The text contains major sentence boundary issues, fragment sentences, and incorrect verb forms. For instance, sentences like 'It is most longer holidays and they are many values of schools and other educational system don't long time close' exhibit severe structural confusion and incorrect tense usage. Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, and prepositions are misused throughout the text (e.g., 'impact in the students'). Because errors are pervasive across almost every sentence and impede overall comprehension, the writing corresponds to a Band 4 level.

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