Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In many number of nation , primary and seconday schools shutdown for two months or more in the hot season .what is the main reasong of the long holidays. as per my my mind, schools must bh shut down in the period of heat wave,.

Overall ,In the summer period temprature is high near about 50 plus temprature in different states . so the Governament decide the scholl will be closed due to heavey hot weve days .

Well, due to hot ways children being sick in every days in some child die due to faceing high temprature .Like in Pakistan in Summer temprature high to approximately 56fh . sun heat demage many thing but quickly effect on children . so that's why childeren school mostly closed in these days ,Whatever, due to this step parents save childres expenses also save children life ,

shoerter holidays is also good because children connect to teacher , and not forget to recent read sylybus ,Children and also parents to stay happy due to shortage holidays , Because children remind and sleeping and reading well.

i.e My friend is open a sschool in Pakistan,Sibi . School is base of primarry,Well furnished avalibilty of air condactioner and give a very pleasent envoirment to children But one day unfortunately electricty was gone , and temprature in this area approximatley 60 plus . so many childrean dehadrate and feeling sick and diaria . so every parents sue on the school owner . so they are facing vary difficulty to handle this situation .

As per my openion in summer season school mush be close for save children due to unpredicted incident . or provide all kind of facality to secure mishapend .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long holidays (protecting children from extreme heat and saving expenses) and touching upon shorter holidays. However, the development of ideas is limited, heavily repetitive, and hindered by numerous tangents regarding specific personal anecdotes, such as the friend's school in Sibi, Pakistan. The position is somewhat unclear due to erratic paragraphing and disjointed arguments. While the student identifies the core theme of heat waves and safety, the lack of structured support keeps this performance within the lower band criteria. The ideas presented are under-developed and lack the depth expected for a fully realized academic essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are major weaknesses in this essay. The text lacks clear logical organization and progression throughout. Paragraphing is highly irregular and chaotic, with sentences broken across arbitrary line breaks and punctuation misused. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, as seen in transitions like 'Well,', 'Whatever,', and 'i.e'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. While there is a basic chronological attempt to tell a story about the school in Pakistan, the overall arrangement fails to establish a coherent structure or smooth transitions between the two distinct prompts.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe spelling errors and inappropriate word choices. Examples include 'seconday' for secondary, 'reasong' for reason, 'temprature' for temperature, 'heavey hot weve' for heavy heat wave, 'fh' for Fahrenheit, 'demage' for damage, 'shoerter' for shorter, 'sylybus' for syllabus, 'avallibilty' for availability, 'condactioner' for air conditioner, 'dehadrate' for dehydrate, 'diaria' for diarrhea, and 'mishapend' for mishap. These persistent spelling mistakes and non-standard lexical items severely limit the range of vocabulary and strain the reader, fitting the descriptors for a band 4.0 where vocabulary is basic and errors impede clear understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 3.5

Grammatical range and accuracy are extremely limited, with frequent, severe errors that distort meaning and cause constant difficulty for the reader. The response consists mainly of simple, highly flawed sentence structures with almost no accurate complex sentences. Examples of severe grammatical inaccuracies include 'In many number of nation', 'schools must bh shut down', 'Governament decide the scholl will be closed', 'children being sick in every days', 'in some child die', 'parents save childres expenses', 'My friend is open a sschool', and 'every parents sue on the school owner'. Punctuation is also heavily misused, with spaces before commas and periods. These dense, continuous errors place the writing firmly in the lower band range.

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