Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, arguement on summer holidays that primary and secondary schools close for two months or more has become increasingly common in many countries. It have play very important role in student life by giving a large time to do extra caricular activity as well as make decigen what field student grow there future. However the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays by many peoples for reason such as gap in study and children not mature much to use it much productive.

Importance of long school holiday is to make a child to do parttime work, parttime work with study is a very common in western countries. It make student encounter to real business how work. For Instance, Children work in cafe and restrorent such as starbucks and mc donard as a bartender, reseptionest or cashier. Another reason is to find a particular neash the individual intrest. In holidays children find which field he intrest or want to make carrier in future. For example, A kid who intrest in video editing have enough time to rearn it properly and do related course in it then practice it freelancing.

On other hand many peoples bleave it is to long for student, it shoud be little shorter.

The main reasion they give is gap in study. 2 months of holiday is such a large periad it make a large gap in study. Children is lost it intrest in study after a long time, It change is schadule. Furthermore Children are not much mature to comite her future carrer.At young children mind is easly divert from one to another.

In conclugen, Value of long school holidays is make decigen what field student grow there future as well as expreance of work culture. Although arguments in favour of shorter school holidays also have genuen reasions like gap in study and children not mature much

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long school holidays and the arguments for shorter ones. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the discussion on part-time work mentions practical experience in western countries and gives examples like Starbucks or McDonald's, but the elaboration remains underdeveloped. Similarly, the arguments for shorter holidays mention study gaps and maturity issues without substantial extension. The position is evident throughout, but generalisations and underdeveloped points prevent the response from reaching higher bands. It meets the criteria for Band 5 by addressing the prompt overall while presenting limited and partially developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some logical organisation with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, but overall progression is hindered by poor paragraphing and weak cohesive devices. The second body paragraph is extremely brief, and sentences often lack clear linking. Transitional phrases like 'On other hand' and 'In conclugen' are inaccurate or mechanical. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as 'It have play very important role' where the pronoun antecedent is ambiguous. While there is a basic structure, the inadequate and repetitive use of cohesive devices places this response securely at Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is limited and basic, with noticeable errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent spelling mistakes throughout the text, such as 'arguement' instead of argument, 'caricular' for extracurricular, 'decigen' for decide or decision, 'neash' for niche, 'intrest' for interested, 'rearn' for learn, 'bleave' for believe, 'reasion' for reason, 'periad' for period, 'schadule' for schedule, 'comite' for commit, and 'conclugen' for conclusion. These lexical inaccuracies and severe spelling errors restrict the vocabulary range and frequently impede smooth communication, aligning with the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures and frequent errors that distort meaning. Simple sentences are constructed with basic grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('It have play', 'Children is lost it intrest', 'Children are not much mature'). Attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty and missing necessary articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and comma splices. Because errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the response, significantly straining the reader, it meets the criteria for a Band 4.

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