Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.
What is the value of long school holidays?
What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
According to some people, primary and secondary schools have a two-month or more summer break in many countries. Some people belive that long schools holidays valuable to the students while others think that holidays shouldn't be too long. The idea of both groups of people seems worth supporting for me.
On the one hand, students and teachers need to take a break from studies in order to gain a new experience and spend time with their family. Holidays are really useful to all from students to adults. For example, in holidays, children can travel to another country or their own country where they never visit. It is very useful to broden their horizon, gain new experience, try
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
Javob ushbu bandga mos, chunki topshiriqqa juda yuzaki javob beradi va talab qilingan so‘zlar soniga yetmaydi: matn 117 ta so‘zdan keyin to‘satdan tugaydi. Topshiriqda maktab ta’tilining uzoq bo‘lishi qanchalik foydali ekani va ta’tilni qisqartirish foydasiga keltiriladigan dalillar muhokama qilinishi so‘ralgan. Muallif ta’tilning foydasiga to‘xtalib, bolalar sayohat qilishi va oilasi bilan vaqt o‘tkazishi mumkinligini aytadi, biroq javob tugallanmagan va topshiriqning qisqaroq ta’til haqidagi ikkinchi qismiga javob bermaydi. Fikrlar juda kam rivojlantirilgan, muallifning umumiy pozitsiyasi esa kirish qismidagi 'The idea of both groups of people seems worth supporting for me.' iborasi orqali faqat bilvosita anglashiladi. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun muallif inshoni talab qilingan eng kam uzunlikka yetkazishi, topshiriqning barcha qismlariga to‘liq javob berishi va har bir asosiy fikrni yetarli dalil hamda misollar bilan rivojlantirishi kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
Javobda kirish paragrafi va 'On the one hand,' iborasi bilan boshlangan asosiy paragrafning boshlanishi kabi ayrim sodda tashkiliy unsurlar bor. Biroq insho muddatidan oldin tugagani sababli matn bo‘ylab aniq izchil rivojlanish kuzatilmaydi. Paragraflarga ajratishga urinish bor, ammo keskin tugash tuzilmaning to‘liq shakllanishiga to‘sqinlik qiladi. Bog‘lovchi vositalar sodda va biroz takroriy: masalan, 'Some people...' iborasidan keyin darhol yana 'Some people...' keladi. 'useful to all from students to adults' jumlasida ko‘ringanidek, ayrim ishoralar noaniq. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun muallif ma’lumotlarni aniq izchillik asosida mantiqiyroq tartibga solishi, bog‘lovchi vositalarni takrorlamasdan turlicha qo‘llashi hamda dalilning barcha qismlarini ravon bog‘laydigan to‘liq asosiy paragraflar va xulosa yozishi kerak.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Ishlatilgan lug‘at cheklangan, ammo asosiy fikrlarni ifodalash uchun eng kam darajada yetarli va ushbu bandga mos. Muallif 'broden their horizon' kabi kamroq uchraydigan iboralarni ishlatishga uringan, biroq imlo va so‘z shakli xatolari bunga putur yetkazadi. E’tiborga molik xatolar qatoriga believe o‘rniga 'belive', school holidays o‘rniga 'schools holidays' va broaden o‘rniga 'broden' ishlatilgani kiradi. So‘z birikmalari va so‘z tanlovi ham ba’zan noqulay; masalan, 'which they have never visited' o‘rniga 'where they never visit' deyilgan. Bu xatolar o‘quvchiga matnni tushunishni qiyinlashtiradi. Keyingi bandga erishish uchun muallif lug‘at boyligini kengaytirishi, kamroq uchraydigan so‘zlarni uslub va so‘z birikmalariga mos ravishda aniqroq ishlatishi hamda matnni diqqat bilan tekshirib, asosiy imlo xatolarini bartaraf etishi kerak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Qo‘llangan grammatik tuzilmalar ancha sodda, murakkabroq gaplar tuzishga urinishlar esa ko‘pincha xatoli. Matnda o‘quvchiga tushunishni qiyinlashtirishi mumkin bo‘lgan ko‘plab xatolar bor. Masalan, 'during holidays' o‘rniga 'in holidays' ishlatilgani kabi predlog va artikl xatolari uchraydi. Fe’l shakllari va ega-kesim mosligida ham muammolar bor; bunga 'schools have a two-month or more summer break' jumlasi hamda matn oxiridagi tugallanmagan gap ('try') misol bo‘ladi. Tinish belgilari va gap chegaralarini to‘g‘ri qo‘llash ustida ham ishlash kerak. Yuqoriroq bandga erishish uchun muallif turli xil gap tuzilmalaridan ko‘proq foydalanishi, xatosiz gaplar ulushini oshirishi hamda fe’l zamonlari, artikllar va predloglarni aniqroq qo‘llashi lozim.
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