Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadyas, population has been gradually increase day by day in the 2-5 years gap.this people think that the summer holidays has been increase in the primary and secondary school. many countries, this statement was agrue as well as some countries people think that the school have been shorter school holidays. I believe that summer vacation is shorter because the student was freashely and the good enviromental things.

Firsrly, i think primary and secondary schools close for shorter holidays. i believe it is right dicission for the student and parents who believe student going to the school and learn more think in the time. parents and students things time is learning new think, new object and science and tecnology. Howerver, student can focus in the this time they will easy for their exam time good scorer achieve. while, primary andsecondary school close for severals days.

Secondly, in many countrie, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer this statement was also right because the student can achieve more vacation they will be happy in the season.in this time student was quitely enjoy, travel and many activities when they hepls in the thier education, body balance. it is very important in the learin age student they will be learning

in this time.

In country decide the things things in their cities studen so they they plan priary and secondary schools close for two months 0r more in the summer holidays. but some people that it is time waste for the student in the time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally, which is characteristic of the lower bands. Furthermore, the length requirement is NOT met as the response contains 244 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum (note that 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted). While the writer attempts to discuss both the value of long holidays and arguments for shorter ones, the ideas are presented in a very fragmented and confused manner. The position is difficult to follow, and the arguments are severely under-developed, lacking clear examples or coherent elaboration. To reach a higher level, the writer must ensure the word count exceeds the minimum, directly and fully address all parts of the prompt with well-developed ideas, and maintain a clear, consistent position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. Although the writer attempts to use basic transition signals like 'Firsrly', 'Secondly', and 'In country decide', the overall logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing sentence structures and abrupt shifts in topic. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal organization of paragraphs lacks clear progression and topic sentences. Referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader struggling to connect the ideas. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to group related ideas logically into well-defined paragraphs, ensure a clear overall progression from introduction to conclusion, and use cohesive devices more accurately to link sentences and paragraphs smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, and frequent errors significantly strain the reader's comprehension. Throughout the text, there are numerous issues with word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'Nowadyas', 'freashely', 'dicission', 'tecnology', 'countrie', and 'learin'. The writer uses a very limited pool of words, often repeating terms like 'student', 'school', and 'summer holidays' without variation. To move to a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range, demonstrate better control over word formation and spelling, and incorporate less common vocabulary with greater accuracy and appropriate collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and errors are frequent throughout, often distorting the intended meaning. Sentences frequently lack basic grammatical integrity, such as subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage, exemplified by phrases like 'population has been gradually increase' and 'student was freashely and the good enviromental things.' Punctuation and article usage are also weak. The writer relies heavily on simple sentence attempts that are frequently faulty, with almost no error-free complex sentences. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of grammatical structures, improve control over basic sentence patterns, verb forms, and articles, and significantly reduce the frequency of grammatical errors.

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