Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In many nations primary and secondary education institudes are close for longer period more then 2 months or more in the summer vacations there are split arguments regarding to this topic is discussed. while some nations advocate that longer holidays provided a more time to relax the sutdents self and give the rest to their mind,fewer are of the argue that holidays in institute are have been shorter.Therefore prior to my argument for bothe side are discussed and ensuring write ups with appropiate examples.

Discussing the former argument, the foremost argument that value of a long school holidays means students having longer time to spant with their family and relax their mind from educational pressure.Moreover it will provide a opportunity to the students to go for trips and explore the new culture and new land scapes also long holidays are provide extra time to learn somthing diffrent skills to grow up their personality and also it helps to earn money.

Conversely the heaters of the opposite opinion have their own arguments. To begin with wasting the time on un productive activity such as on social media, long hours of sleeping or doing nothing while thy are at home.In addition more use of social midea it will lead to the anxity and depretion also it reduce ability to thinkinhg and taking action by mind. Moreover, students some time disturbing and performing kind of problamatic activity and they will put their lifes into risk.

To reiterate although in my perseption long holidays because of it provide a wxtra time for a diffrent kind of activity to enjoy your self in learn somthing new in holiday period also it will reduce the extra pressure from mind while enjoing holidays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the value of long school holidays and the arguments for shorter ones, which places it in the mid-range. However, the ideas are presented in a limited way and some development is superficial or unclear. For instance, the discussion on the value of holidays mentions relaxing the mind and learning skills, but these points are rushed rather than fully extended with clear examples. Similarly, the counter-arguments regarding negative activities like social media use and anxiety are introduced but lack detailed support. The writer attempts to take a position, but the overall progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of depth, particularly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraph division for the introduction, the two body paragraphs covering opposing views, and a brief conclusion. There is an attempt to sequence ideas logically, moving from the benefits of long holidays to the drawbacks. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Cohesive devices are often used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting sentences with phrases like 'Conversely the heaters of the opposite opinion' or 'To reiterate although in my perseption'. Referencing and logical progression between sentences can be unclear, requiring the reader to work harder to follow the intended argument, which is characteristic of this level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'institudes', 'land scapes', 'un productive', and 'depretion', but these attempts are frequently marred by spelling errors and incorrect word choices. There are noticeable errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'heaters' instead of proponents or critics, and 'spant' instead of spend. While the meaning can generally be deciphered, these frequent lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher rating.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or attempted complex sentences that are consistently faulty. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tenses, article usage, and subject-verb agreement throughout the text, such as 'education institudes are close', 'longer holidays provided a more time', and 'holidays in institute are have been shorter'. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences lacking proper commas or full stops. These frequent grammatical errors occur across the majority of sentences and can cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the writing firmly in this band.

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