Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The for this act near me is quite simple as to say. Children in these years of there life are at a learning stage and often hit a wall. The reason for this is that their mind needs time to abosorb all the things they are learning, all the knowledge. The need to freshen themselves for the new things to learn and allow themselves to incorporate what they have learnt in the previous year into their lives where ever they see fit. This allows them to take in to consideration their whole knowledge and when they apply some of this knowledge they have gained in their lives willingly the becomes fascinated by it and show the resolves to learn more of it. While some happened to face it otherwise. This happens because of the confinement they face by their parents in my prespective. The child should be allowed to explore himself and make decision that will prove to be helpful to him. This would allow them to gain enlightenment in the feild they would want to work in future. While these long holidays have their perks. I would also confer to have shorter holidays as well. As such said holidays would prove to be booster for the kids when they are getting mentally tired from abosorbing too much knowledge not knowing how to utilize it. These short holidays would give them a breather from such pressure that could bury them and allow themselves to look after their health as well. As we all know that a happy body means a happy mind and a happy mind means a happy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions in a general way: you explain that long breaks let children absorb and apply what they have learned, and that shorter breaks can provide relief when they feel mentally tired. These are relevant ideas, but the response only partially fulfils the task because the arguments remain broad and are not supported with a specific example or clear explanation of how either holiday pattern benefits pupils. The discussion of children’s freedom to explore and parental confinement is not clearly connected to the value of a long summer holiday. Your position is also difficult to identify: you say you would favour shorter holidays, but do not explain how this preference relates to the benefits of longer ones. Develop each side with a concrete reason and example, then state your view clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response moves from the possible benefits of long holidays to the case for shorter breaks, so the reader can recognise the two main parts of the discussion. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the progression within the first part is difficult to follow: the points about absorbing knowledge, applying it, parental confinement, and future work are joined without clear links. Several transitions, including “While some happened to face it otherwise” and “While these long holidays have their perks,” are unclear or awkwardly placed. Use separate paragraphs for the two sides, begin each with a clear topic sentence, and explain one idea at a time. Clearer referencing and fewer loosely connected transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, such as “incorporate,” “confinement,” “enlightenment,” and “mentally tired,” and phrases like “a breather” help convey the idea of rest. However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, which sometimes makes the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “The for this act near me” does not communicate a clear idea, while “show the resolves to learn more” and “booster for the kids” are not natural expressions in this context. Spelling errors such as “abosorb,” “prespective,” and “feild” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling; for instance, describe pupils as “consolidating what they have learned” rather than “incorporate” knowledge into their lives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences with subordinate clauses, for example, “The reason for this is that their mind needs time…” and “These short holidays would give them a breather…,” but complex structures are often faulty or incomplete. The opening, “The for this act near me is quite simple as to say,” is not a complete, clear grammatical construction. Other problems include “the becomes fascinated,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “While some happened to face it otherwise,” which is a fragment. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, particularly where ideas are joined with “While.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that pronouns refer clearly to their nouns.

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