Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals think that in many countries primary and secondary schools close for two or more months in the summer holidays . Although long holidays are benificial for childrens because help us to reduce stress and mental health while other believe that children do not continue study and distract it. in my opinion its advantages ate more

to begin with in this trend driven by number of key factors First of all, many individuals think that long holidays are important for children because it spends quality time with their families and they should take some time for study and everyone children's are tired and stressed Moreover, students visits new places like shopping mall, zoological park, and going to relatives house and enjoy their hobbies. In spite of , children have burden in academics and tuitions . they can feel relaxed and happy and returned to school with more energy. furthermore, children should perform fun activities with their family

On the contrary, despite having numerous causes doea this development can be solved? certainly yes? Primarily, some people think that shorter holidays are much better beacuse students can continue theri study regularly and remember their lessons repeat. Additionally,shorter holidays can help students develop good their studies. for example, they can revise their all chapters and does not distracted with thier phones.

In conclusion, even though the merits anociated with this development are long holidays help us to relax and visit different placeswhile short Holidays continue stidy regularly and stay focus on thier study.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you describe benefits of long holidays, such as spending time with family, visiting places and relaxing, and give reasons for shorter breaks, including regular study and revision. Your view that the advantages of long holidays are greater is present, but it is not clearly explained or consistently reinforced. Several points remain general—for example, the claim that children return with “more energy” would be stronger with a specific explanation or example. The response also falls short of the required 250 words: 241 words were counted, with 10 words copied from the prompt excluded. Develop each argument further and make your comparison and final position more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from an opening position to a paragraph supporting long holidays, then a contrasting paragraph and a conclusion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and the second body paragraph begins with the unclear question, “despite having numerous causes doea this development can be solved?” Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “On the contrary,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to connect ideas, but some are awkward or do not express the relationship accurately. The conclusion also compresses both sides into one unclear sentence. Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph, connect each supporting detail to its main point, and avoid adding transitions that do not fit the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “stress,” “academics,” “revise,” “hobbies,” and “burden,” so the reader can identify the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “it spends quality time,” “develop good their studies,” and “continue stidy regularly.” Spelling errors such as “benificial,” “beacuse,” and “thier” also reduce clarity. Aim to learn useful topic phrases as complete units and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for relaxation, learning continuity and academic pressure would help you explain the contrast between the two holiday patterns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, as in “Although long holidays are…” and “because students can…,” but complex sentences are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors that make the reader work to understand them. For example, “Although long holidays are benificial for childrens because help us…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “students visits” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals, verb forms and sentence boundaries, including the run-on final sentence. Build accuracy with short, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check that each sentence has a subject and a correctly formed verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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