Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in many countries primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays it is very harmful desition for now days kids because many country close schools for two months or more months in summer holidays it is no value long school holidays is just time weast for childrens.

in the context in many countries primary and secondary schools close for many months or more in the summer vecation but it is effact of childrens studies when start of holidays childrens are happy but children not doing homework just playing videogames and watching movie one to two weeks is ok but two months or more in is not good for our childrens some days is ok for holidays becuse childrens spend some time of their parents and playing game or watching movie but its not good to two months to more months it is no value of school holidays its effact to our new generation childrens exams and their studies .

in the context i am in arguments favour of shorter school holidays becuse children are forget their studies becuse the long school holidays childrens are children may devlop to bad habits and forget to their study and the children are on their holidays only playing games and watching movie so the reson my favour is shorter holidays .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear view that long holidays are harmful and that shorter breaks are preferable, and you mention possible effects such as children forgetting their studies and developing bad habits. However, the task asks both about the value of long holidays and arguments for shorter ones. The value of longer holidays is not really explained: you briefly mention time with parents and leisure, but then dismiss these points without developing them. Your reasons for shorter holidays are also repeated rather than supported with specific examples. The response contains 197 words, below the required 250; 26 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with distinct reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an opening paragraph states your position, the next discusses holidays, and the final paragraph gives your preference for shorter breaks. This helps the reader identify your main view. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and ideas are often repeated, especially the claims that children play games, watch movies, and forget their studies. Phrases such as “in the context” do not clearly connect the points, while repeated use of “because” makes the links mechanical. Some sentences run together without clear punctuation, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the benefits of long holidays and the case for shorter ones, then connect each reason to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but it communicates the central topic and position through words such as “holidays,” “children,” “studies,” and “shorter.” You also attempt to express consequences with phrases such as “bad habits” and “new generation.” However, repeated wording limits precision, and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, including “desition,” “weast,” “effact,” and “vecation.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “no value long school holidays” and “spend some time of their parents.” Build a more varied set of accurate expressions for benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You mainly use simple statements and make an attempt to join ideas with clauses using “because” and “when.” This shows some effort to explain causes and effects, but the range of sentence structures remains very limited. Errors in sentence formation and grammar are frequent and sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “when start of holidays childrens are happy” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “children are forget their studies” uses an incorrect verb form. Agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention; many ideas are joined into long strings without full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses and use sentence-ending punctuation consistently.

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