Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This statement shows that how worthy are the long school holidays. Mean while in many countries primary and secondary school close for two months or more in the summer holidays. In my point of view it is bad to had long holidays. However the students want to got more holidays.

Through it the main reason is they do not want to study. Moreover they want to play. Along this it is the main reason that they want freedom. For intence through the school timing which is make them punctual and it is up to them to follow the rules.

I think there is no value

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a basic attempt to give a view, stating, “I think there is no value” and that long holidays are “bad,” but it does not explain the value of long holidays or develop the arguments for shorter holidays. The comments that students want to play and have freedom are relevant starting points, yet they are not connected clearly to the effects of holiday length or supported with examples. The response also ends before the ideas are completed. It contains 95 words, so it is 155 words below the required minimum; the 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded. To improve, address both questions directly, explain each reason, and add specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a small amount of organisation: the opening introduces the topic and the next section gives reasons for students wanting holidays. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Along this” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because relationships between points are unclear, and the final statement, “I think there is no value,” is not developed or linked to the earlier discussion. Paragraphing does not yet guide the reader through a complete argument. Use a clear structure—introduction, one paragraph on the value of long holidays, one on shorter holidays, and a conclusion—and make each linking phrase express the actual relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “school holidays,” “freedom,” “punctual,” and “rules,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several choices or phrases are inaccurate or unclear, such as “how worthy are the long school holidays,” “Through it,” and “For intence.” These problems make some ideas harder to understand and limit precision. Build a more useful range for discussing education and time off, such as “academic break,” “rest and recovery,” “learning continuity,” and “school routine.” Check spelling and learn common word partnerships, then use them in complete explanations rather than relying on repeated general words such as “want” and “holidays.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer clauses, for example, “Moreover they want to play” and “it is the main reason that they want freedom.” However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. Examples include “it is bad to had long holidays,” “the students want to got more holidays,” and “the school timing which is make them punctual.” These forms make the intended meaning less clear. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, including the unfinished final thought. Practise accurate infinitive patterns (“to have,” “to get”) and subject–verb forms, and write shorter complete sentences before combining them with conjunctions or relative clauses.

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