Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given diagram, provide some data related to the local people's library in the area, which is called Little Chalfont.

Reporting the main features of Little Chalfont Library.

In the given chart, mention the four different age groups. In which is Children, Younger adults 13 to 17 years, adults from 18 to 64 and adulta from 65 and over. The adults aged 18 to 64 are 51%, and the second largest group is children 22%,on theird group is 15%, and the last group is Adults 65 and over.

But the total loans by category in 2016 is children which fication is 38% and non fication is 6%and also DVDs are 1%. And younger adults are only 2%. The 2nd loans by category is Aadults fication is 38%and non-fiction is 13%, and also adult audio books is 2%. this information show that in the loans category the fiction of chieldren and adults is same 38% but other is different.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify relevant information from the charts, including the largest membership group (adults aged 18–64 at 51%) and the matching 38% shares for children’s and adult fiction. However, the response mainly lists figures and does not give a clear overview of the most important patterns, especially the overall loan trend from 2007 to 2016, which is absent. Some details are also incomplete: the 15% and 12% membership groups are not clearly assigned, and the loan categories are described without explaining their relative importance. To strengthen the report, summarise the key features first, cover all three visuals, and make accurate comparisons rather than presenting disconnected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some grouping of information: you discuss membership figures first and loan categories afterwards, and the final sentence attempts to compare the two fiction shares. However, the opening lines repeat the task rather than establishing a clear overview, and the response has no distinct paragraph structure to guide the reader through the three visuals. Connections such as “But” and “And also” are used mechanically, while phrases like “the second largest group” and “the 2nd loans by category” make the sequence difficult to follow. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear links to show comparisons and shifts between charts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “age groups,” “total loans by category,” “fiction,” and “non-fiction,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce clarity, such as “fication,” “chieldren,” “Aadults,” and “on theird group.” Repeated use of “and also” and “is” also makes the description sound basic. Use precise terms such as “accounted for,” “share,” and “loan category,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid calling the figures “data” without specifying what they represent; accurate labels will make comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, but sentence structures are often incomplete or awkward. For example, “In which is Children…” is a fragment, and “this information show” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “But the total loans by category…” runs several details together without clear grammatical links, and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly where commas and percentages are joined directly to words. These problems sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use consistent present or past tense, and separate category details with accurate punctuation. A few well-controlled comparison structures would also demonstrate greater range.

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